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Aren't you going to create them out of nothing? It's just fear because of the comment that said sorry

And very conveniently you know how to make all the human technology since the ancient Chinese era and how to apply it? You know, I don't even have to say how that was seen in the chapter.

I think I missed the name, not everything should have blood in the name because it's not that way, how about infant killing soul? Sounds more like what is described

In your tech jacket he will be younger? Or how it differs from the original since it takes place in the same universe when Mark is no longer on Earth.

Team No-more heroes

Team titan slash

Team cross slayer

Black radiant

I don't want to sound critical but problems equal a good plot or an acceptable arc, removing them early equals plain and bland wish fulfillment.

Very empty, give too much power to a protagonist and you generate hatred, plus the fact that he does not need a power up for now with everything he has, if he trains him he could defeat thragg and the novel would end shortly after, I know the author said it is nfws with a plot but it develops it too well for me to drop it because we asked for more nfws

Pretty good but I think it was too short and you could have given Debbie more prominence in this chapter as a point of view when her husband confesses everything or some cameo hero as black samson

Personally, I think it's better to give it to Amber or get it herself because the suit gave an ordinary human the strength equal to Mark's, imagine giving that to a vultrumite with speed strength, too rotobromoe the plot, although it would be great if he could mess with that story, I seriously don't like the protagonist, he reminds me of Peter from the guardians of the galaxy, hateful, crybaby and very immature (even cross it out, Starlord was better than him, for God's sake)

You could use the villains that I know are shown in the comics, not all of them are great villains but there is mention of some that you can use from time to time to fill in, there are also the spin off comics of invincible that can help further expand the universe of this same , or use drama, the rex and eve thing can be used to complete a mini arc and make it a good arc

I agree with this guy aside, the protagonist becomes an idiot with his girlfriend because he cheats on her with a woman when he cheats on her once every adventure

It is obvious that Orochinaru took the most dangerous jutsus while with a genjutsu he deceived the village, it could also be Danzo trying to destroy forbidden power or take it away or Itachi trying to create a more peaceful Konoha

Thanks for listening to my comment, I suggest you start with the comics of the current saga since the Archie ones follow the television series and the games.

Author, do you know Sonic? Have you not thought about making a story that follows the plot of the comics? I feel like if it were you it would be interesting to see what you would do with it.

I have a doubt, Padme and Annie got married but what happened to the protagonist in all this wedding? Will you leave it like that? Because apparently Annie loves the protagonist and Padme will have his son.

Tengo una idea y si usas esas historias en tu otro fic el del gordo aun se podría ya que si usan aun magia y fantasía no lo dejaste tan desarrollado para no poner cosas de la vida real, ey curioso usas lo viejo para dar algo nuevo como con McDonald y sus comida