Webnovel Author: FrozenOverTheMoon - Novel Collection

FrozenOverTheMoon

FrozenOverTheMoon

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2020-02-27 เข้าร่วมแล้ว United States

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There are a lot of things that are fairly original in this novel. For one, the system feels unique in many aspects; I am not a big fan of System novels in general but I still found a lot of enjoyment with this. But where this story shines is in lore and fantasy! The Author does a phenomenal job at world-building and setting up interesting settings. There is a lot of creativity in his writing and I wish to see more! The only slight negative I have with this is the pacing which is way quicker than what I am used to, but that isn't the fault of the author; it's just their writing style. The action is also very amazing so I don't think you will ever be bored reading this! A solid 4.8/5 stars!

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Slow down the pacing just a bit and fix a few phrases here and there. Other than that, a perfect start to a new story.

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Disregarding his clear signs of psychopathic behavior, is this man superman?! He just ripped out a door like it was nothing...

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Blood and Oil

Blood and Oil

Sci-fi · Unga_Bunga_7766

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I will never let bro walk this off

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Blood and Oil

Blood and Oil

Sci-fi · Unga_Bunga_7766

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needs a comma between prank and player.

"Did you like my prank player? I for one find it quite humorous." It was the orb from earlier in the morning.

apocalypse runner system

apocalypse runner system

Fantasy · derpydinosaur

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used 'Lecture' twice. try not to overuse words in the same sentence/paragraph.

Jason braced for a lecture but thankfully his mother seemed to be in a non-lecturing mood, a rarity that only happened once in a blue moon.

apocalypse runner system

apocalypse runner system

Fantasy · derpydinosaur

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SKULLS FOR THE SKULL THRONE!

"This is madness. You're asking for trust, yet you've always kept me in the dark. I never needed saving, and I would've preferred death over becoming an executioner, even for someone wicked," Lucian's words quivered.

Lunar Ascension

Lunar Ascension

Fantasy · monawrita

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bro is acting like a child lol

"I need an explanation then. What is it that you require of me? Why are you doing this? I had a good life here, I was happy. Now, all I can think about is how I've become a ruthless killer. The first time I killed, it was in self-defense. But this... this was an execution. I wish you had never granted me any powers. I wish I had never set foot in this world. Is that also your doing? I wish you didn't exist!" Lucian's words were heavy with emotion.

Lunar Ascension

Lunar Ascension

Fantasy · monawrita

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Cut off sentence?

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Lunar Veil: A Tale of Untamed Shadows

Lunar Veil: A Tale of Untamed Shadows

Fantasy · samandridaku

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