Good, intriguing story, There are a few minor mistakes, but nothing that is unfixable. For example, the beginning of the first chapter is a bit explain-y. Too much info at one time can bore the reader. After that, the story is very fluid and smooth. Good job so far!
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Very interesting name. Does it hold some kind of meaning?
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History · NotBeatrix
I'm really starting to fall in love with the writing style. Some stories need simpler styles, and some need more sophisticated descriptions to paint an image. You picked the perfect style that suits the mood of the story.
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History · NotBeatrix
Jesus, this is so good. Your descriptions are actually insane. Reminds me of stories I used to read in the library as a kid.
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History · NotBeatrix
Love the descriptive words so far.
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History · NotBeatrix
Her ears are too high level for you peasants
The woman thought; 'Actually, I can hear all your whispers and gossips around, and no need to lower your voices because it's no use'
Fantasy · empressblackrose09
Great sense of red emotions here. I felt a chill down my spine.
The memories were still fresh inside of me, haunting my sight wherever I went. Clementine's eyes gawked at me, begging for me to help her from the miserable state brought by the monster.
Fantasy · kuhaku_sora
I really love this story so far. The worldbuilding is great, but the way you formulated your words was even better. It's incredibly unique the way you form your sentences, and the descriptions are great.
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Fantasy · TheMortalGod