Webnovel Author: Mtotheizow - Novel Collection

Yo yo yo its ya boi Mtotheizow. The story wont really kick off until somewhere between the 10-20 chapter mark everything before that is kind of founding Sito's background and world building. i tried to make the info dumps bearable instead of just monotonus bolcks of chapters to get it out of the way. Sito will be an op badass dude, none of that shy or dumb mc bs. update stability will be garbage as i dont have much time to write between work, gym, and life in general so itll be like 1 chapter every one to two weeksish cuz im using this as a rough draft and wont ever monetize it cuz i dont wanna contract with webnovel im just doing this for fun. so i kind of just post a chapter when im done and dont have posting schedule. im also a perfectionist so i go over several times and fine tune it before posting which doesnt help the speed of drops. if you like what youve read so far add it to ur library and come back in a year lol. i usually like huge amount of chapters when i start novels or else it just feels like a tease so itd be messed up for me to expect you guys to read it everytime a chapter drops. preciate u guys, if u notice any plot or grammar mistakes please comment.

All the free chapters (35 chapters) take place in the span of like 10 hours. The story seems interesting but it’s just taking forever man he’s spent like 15 chapters on just one conversation that isn’t even done by chapter 35 so who knows how much longer it goes on.

The premise of the story is very good but 36 chapters only covering 2 days of content makes reading the story feel extremly tedious. Also, the grammar just makes zero sense in a lot of parts (especially the dialogue) and completely ruins any sort of character interaction that happens. If the grammar and pacing get fixed then the outcome would be a top-tier novel my friend.

this novel is just one giant info dump after info dump and makes for a very tedious read. Has a lot of potential but the author drags everything out by getting bogged down in explaining every little detail and gives every chracter massive monologues that will sometimes last entire chapters just to overexplain things in ways a normal conversation never would.

Great concept and strong start, however i cannot get past the terrible dialogue. The main character really said "Wow! you werent kidding about your cooking skills. This is wifey-level skill right here for sure! Someone needs to wife you up ASAP!" Like bro nobody talks like that. I'm convinced the Author's an incel thats never talked to a woman before cuz theres just no way. Its just one of the examples but thats the one that made me stop i just couldnt push thru anymore.

Great worldbuilding with unique beasts, world, and aspects overall that feel very original. The only thing holding the novel back is the author feels the need to explain why something happens and why that why makes that why happen. A single interaction between two characters will take several chapters just because the author always says "Why?" and then proceeds to explain every little excruciating detail so 80% of the novel just ends up being an expostion. The author needs to understand that the readers are not dumb. We can understand context clues. The best stories are told through dialogue not narration.

Thank you so much!! <3