Thank you so much for the insightful review and comments!
Well that took an interesting turn!
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Sci-fi · Raychbunni
This… your story is what I’ve been looking for.
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Sci-fi · Raychbunni
What a way to open up the first scene. So many feelings right now. Wow! I love your style.
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Sci-fi · Raychbunni
You will probably think I’m a noob but I just realized where you placed this comment! I’m still getting used to navigating through webnovel. I did want to say that I really like your writing style, and again, I appreciate your input.
Howling Shadows, while it is a work of fiction, tries to cover some heavy topics. In these pages you will find tragedy, deep love, and the wickedness of people. Ultimately, the goal of any good story is one that has characters who start out weak and vulnerable, but rise above it all in the end. Overall, I hope these characters resonate with you they way they did with me over the time I've spent writing about them.
Horror · CN_Owens_Author
You are absolutely right. I think my goal was to begin this scene in a very dark place and have the reader rooting for the FL when she finally found the strength to fight back. I appreciate your input!
Howling Shadows, while it is a work of fiction, tries to cover some heavy topics. In these pages you will find tragedy, deep love, and the wickedness of people. Ultimately, the goal of any good story is one that has characters who start out weak and vulnerable, but rise above it all in the end. Overall, I hope these characters resonate with you they way they did with me over the time I've spent writing about them.
Horror · CN_Owens_Author
This is who I think of when I see the name Daenerys. Is that the point?
"Daenerys demands your service. She will have you."
Fantasy · Jolan_Hildebrandt
Thank you for your honest opinion!
Excellent opening, pacing is spot on. I love this!
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Fantasy · trumpet_creeper01
This is good, but should be given the reader more information here? Will the editor have a larger role in the story? If so, giving him/her a name and making this person more relatable might help. Just a thought. [img=recommend]
"The Wangs?" Editor questioned and he nodded quickly. "What about them?" the words ended when the next thing was shown on the white screen.
Fantasy · trumpet_creeper01
Great opening… Makes the reader ask lots of questions.
"We chose this," a man on her left muttered with a hopeless tone and started to scatter away from the group.
Fantasy · trumpet_creeper01
😂 welcome, and thank you!
Thank you for the kind words!
I am a picky reader, but I was pulled in by the opening and found myself flying through this book. Like others have said, a few revisions will really make this shine. I can definitely see and feel the imagery that the author is trying to convey. The POV appears to be 3rd person omnicisient, where the narrator explains everything from a god’s eye view. This is a tricky method to get right without committing the son of author intrusion and pulling the reader out of the story, so again, I commend the author for the effort. Keep going! 🙂🙂
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Urban · binni_seon