Knight_Noctis - Profile

hp translation stories always seems to create these imaginary troubles or.the so called urgency for themselves to give the plot a push . It's getting a little bit annoying as usual.

ooh, the sheer cringe . Also, how the mc gets angry at the haughty tone of thor and then goes around introduces him with all those titles

Chinese names are confusing the story

ah yes , typical translations. every character is divided into three categories: enemy,.bootlicker, girlfriend

Well, you can slowly try to poison him with mercury though.

I always look forward to danzo execution as early as possible in Naruto fanfics. I'd say to end it, but it could become political warfare. I'd hope that you maintain the consistency fact that mc only has vague memories in the future as well .

kazir's mother is not a mental patient . It feels like an excuse for her to screw over the mc.She deserves what's coming her way. I hope kazir makes sure she doesn't cause any future problems

meh . After transmigration, the first thing he thinks about all the wrong other people did. A little bit rushed, I would say. Also, about dark magic, there's a reason it's forbidden. Most can't handle its allure, especially without occulmency.Its a really old and boring trope of trying justifying the use of dark magic.In the time of war, it wasn't . But after war, during peaceful times ,most don't need it except for self-defence. If I'm not wrong, aurors can legally use it, though I'm not sure.

man this is just annoying

As time goes on , your character arc for your mc goes downward . He just works , he simply has no emotion for anyone. He's dating jolie, and it doesn't even feel like he has many desires to the character. He feels like a robot . I feel like the author should focus on mc and his relationship development and his overall character development.

mc seems like a little bit pushover here. I can understand the reasons for not consulting him, but he still their saviour

what's with the cliffhanger? I don't mind, but it'd be prettying annoying if he keeps running his mouth and reveals something. Hate the fact that the guy is so emotional, and he's so attached to the trio. All the chapters were pretty much dialogue exchange between the mc and the trio

Have to say , for a chapter, this was a little bit pointless. It didn't add much to the overall story . I don't know much about the tv series Oc. But if nothing changes from the original story, then this chapter didn't mean much . Anyway, thanks for the chapter.

what a pitiful person

what's with the edgy attitude? He's supposed to be a hero ,not an edgy character. The way he behaves is just childish. I thought he had a previous life, doesn't seem like it.

you could write some chapters dedicated to mc's training. I mean, we really haven't seen much of his training regime after coming under whitebeard . He's already fought some marine, and coupled with his past memory, he should get to training. Also, the origin of his weapon is questionable . You can go on a hunt for a good weapon as well.

for all that monologue anoit changing bro.got scam , he could've make much more if just learn to code .

three deathly hallows have less force points than sorting hats ??