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Writing is not the best especially conversation . Too many crossovers

The idea behind the story Is good, the oc is awful and so is the friendship with Cedric. Overall it needs to be taken back and rewritten to better showcase each scene as the author is a decent writer but feels rushed/unplanned. The story needs to be rethought because so much has happened in no time at alll. Get rid of your oc and Cedric thing bc it just doesn’t I’m sorry

All in all, this is hands down one of the best Harry Potter works fan fiction that you will ever read. It’s right up at the top, it has a fantastic story, it is well thought out. The characters strengths, weakness, and personality are so well thought out and developed. I can honestly say that you will never feel remiss reading this. Rowan is just a fantastic character, Severus grows but retains his core, such a great read!! I can’t stop and want to know how itends. Give us more chapters!!!!!

Absolutely loving this fan fiction, your killing the characters, the subtle story growth and the overall wizarding world interaction. Can’t wait till the school year starts. My only complaint if it could be considered as such is that the author doesn’t write as fast as I read. Great work, keep it up, this is by far thousands times better than any of those system reads.

Keep going it’s killer don’t stop

I have gotten to chapter 18 which is as far as the author has gotten, I think the first chapter or two were decent however the author fell into a rhythm, became more structured and I am very pleased to see the story continue don’t let us down.

Decently put together but character development and strength development are out of whack. Also like to many fanfics the mc Blake becomes over powered as soon as it starts leading away from growth and immersion of the story. I do love the concept between a magical “clone” of albus and grindelwald. In my opinion which this entire review is only an opinion, this concept is a spectacular idea and I only wish the author had gone in another direction. However I’m sure some readers will love it as it will fit their desires in a fanfic.

As of chapter 37 this story is well written, it’s developing the characters and plot while leaving a mystery inplace. I look forward to the twist from the original, so far it is spectacular. Way to go and keep it up! I enjoy how you develop the characters without making them unrelatable to readers and the oc. So far the magic delved into has been well done.

Gotten to the latest update at this time chapter 77. I at first was hesitant with the portrayal of certain characters but have come to really enjoy the story and am convinced to keep finding out more

Enjoyable read, excellent characters, full of excellent references and jokes. So far one of the best Harry Potter fics

An enjoyable read that I would highly recommend

Not terrible but not something I’d consider reading multiple times like Harry Potter second chance, hp the protector or hp the arcane thief.

Story has stopped making sense, characters are acting outside of what they would…. Was well written in the beginning but just started to fall in quality and design.

I have really enjoyed the twists the author has brought without completely altering the story. I look forward to to see what changes ilmm on enjoy and what ones I’ll dislike. As always when I find a good fanfic I want more chapters but quality of quantity.