Shattered Innocence: Transmigrated Into a Novel as an Extra

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Darkness_Enjoyer

Hello, Author here. In this thread, I will clarify some questions regarding the start of the book, and you can treat it as a Q&A as well. Firstly, the novel will seem a little odd to you at the start since it starts differently. But, I must insist that you read the free chapters, the first volume, until the end and bear with it a little since it is just an introduction to the work. I know at the start of the novel, Lucavion doesn't start as your typical main character of such novels, which is something I intended since, at the start of the novel, the main character is 14 years old and mentally unstable due to all the events surrounding him. Even though I know it may be frustrating to read a little, I also think that it is an accurate description of how a person who was put into such a position would think at those moments and the type of psychology that they would have. However, at the end of the first volume, his mentality and everything will have undergone a huge change, making it a lot more readable, and from then on, the story will stretch with many interpersonal relationships going on. For now, this is all I have to say about the book, and you may continue with your questions here. I will answer them if I can.

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thePRIEST

Bruh if you are going to write by using A.I. then make it less obvious. I am 43 chapters in, and it is painful how all the internal monologues are just repeated ideas in different wording. When other characters face off, like in chap 43, then it is obvious that an A.I. is narrating the emotions and dialogue. If you are not using A.I. then you are simply overdoing it - there are better ways to describe character emotions and development.

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radioactive_jig0l0

man!!! the story would have been perfect with some revenge but author made the MC too soft. ruined the story for me and what's the point of reincarnation when he no longer remembers his old memories

The writing is good and all, I actually really like the background and story progression since it seems to stray from the op mc cliche; however, there are firstly, some fillers that I cannot understand why they're there other than to make the readers irritated. On top of that, the novel doesn't need the transmigration tag because for as long as I read, few dozens chapters in, you could've removed the transmigration tag and the introduction chapter, and it would be the exact same thing, like there would be no major differences whatsoever. The tag itself feels like a cheap attempt at clickbaiting that unfortunately worked, reading this novel, for me, was like having fishbone stuck in your throat-- Like I know it supposed to be a tragedy and all, I can perfectly comprehend that, but at least, AT LEAST, makes it so that the transmigrator is actually unique somewhat compared to the native denizens.

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Tamang_7192

The Author seems like going after money using ChatGpt(AI's)instead of focusing on story.I am on chapter 522 and he's still yet to go to Academy despite saying Academy this/that.I speed run the novel and I can say more than 50%chapter are useless(basically fillers).Same information are shown from multiple POV's and if there are new main female characters he read from novel then it takes 3-5 chapter to describe about them and what happened to them which is basically useless.Its a very slow progress storywise,When there seems to be some action , it takes 3-4 chapters for continuing that fight due to useless extra information, POV's.Other books would have finished many arcs by now but hes's busy filtring female MCs per arc in the name of saving them. I am just waiting to see how great of a deal Academy Arc turns out to be since given current power level up,he might overpower teachers and even principals.

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Dieudonner_17

Writing quality is superb Updating stability nothing to say Story and character development. If there were tragedy and slow paced tags I won’t be frustrated 49 chapters in and mc is still canon fodder The frustration is just killing me Everyone seems to bully mc alone and despite his so called star devouring (spoiler) some rank 3 bozo is like heaven while he’s earth(apparently not as talented it’s made to be) If you like slow paced novels where mc is traumatized in more than 30 chapters while growing like a snail this book is for you

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Cha0sTheory

I changed my mind, it's just getting ridiculous now. Not sure if he types in 100 words and asks chatgpt to make it a 1000, or what. The authors pacing is abysmal. 100% doing it just to fluff up chapter count.

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Anonymous_Boiii_69

Sigh again another good novel yet ruined by the MC’s personality. Apparently a whole grown man acts like a manchild. Gets “red faced” approaching probably younger women than him. This is getting cringier and cringier with chapters. I expected a more cold,calculative,ruthless approach not some “Lost child depressive stupidity” approach

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Mdsahadattamim4349

I am dropping this shit. anyone has to be insane to read this shit. 1 night of banquet just a few hours of story, waiting for 150+ chapters to end. this type of transmigrated story that includes academy. means the main story will be in the academy. and after 900+He is now entering the academy. when you can easily fit this story in 200 chapters with everything from main story to characters without missing anything. when will the story end after 10000+ chapters or more. (If I have to describe the story, especially the last 250+ Chapters. how Author Write a story 1 Scene= 90 percent or more useless Monologue 10 percent or less actually something useless + 5 Plus Pov's each with more than 3 chapters without any value or usefulness to the story except increasing the story chapters + And let's Not Forget Our 'AI' I even read in one chapter where chatgpt name was mentioned Author forget to erase.) I am not writing this review for the author to realise his mistakes and not to do this in the future. and make his the novel better. because the author has to be mentally ill to not know the point I mentioned still doing this because this novel is over. the only thing the author is doing is milking the hope of a few readers who still hope this novel gets better or, at the least, go back to how it was before 650+ chapters. when even they lost hope from this shit they stopped reading when the author realised he couldn't milking from readers anymore, then he dropped it. he doesn't even have good motives with this novel. the only reason I am writing this review is venting my anger on wasting time in this novel. I have endured a lot to read this novel, considering how unreasonably annoying the characters are, especially the mc. but I still endure it because the story premises were interesting. but now nothing is left

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DaoistYoursTruly

I'm starting to lose hope in the webnovel community. So many good reviews about this one, praising the "good" writing style and quality. Following this, I had very high expectations, and well, it couldn't deliver. AI Slop. That's what this novel is. The writing is abysmally bad—stretching, word filler, flowery vocabulary, AI word choices, and so on. It's nearly impossible to immerse oneself in this; I had to drop it 10 chapters in. This isn't an anomaly. The author's other books are the same. They aren't slow; they're filled with filler and reek of LLM. Perhaps an interesting story lies beneath the mask of pretense, but I couldn't get through it. And don't misunderstand me. I don't mind authors using LLM to edit their grammar, spelling, and similar mistakes, but in this case, it's clear that the author wants as many words per chapter as possible. Once again, I was disappointed.

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Shrewd_

Earlier, I wrote a comment on how lengthy and exaggerated the latest chapters have gotten. with the authors's most recent fumble on AI GPT Being the real reason. I feel like I have been backstabbed, Truly believed the author had real talent in writing, especially since the begining of this novel. Anyways, i regret spending a single coin on this AI Generated SLOP. Atleast i I won't feel guilty reading this on freesites.

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Peacefully

If I had a dollar for every time he smirked, I’d be richer than the author by now.

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Lazy_Dragonslayer

i belive the author of this novel was kidnapped, and the kiddnapper is using ai to write the rest of the novel. The author after berating all the romance fantasy novels, giving us a well made character in the 1st chapter was then kidnapped and his account was taken over by the brainless kidnapper who made his cheeky, uncaring cool protagonist into a whiny, whipy, moaning male character. The shift in personality is so absurd to the extent i belive the main character did not actually possess the novel but a whiny female protagonist of a my husband is too cruel so i will go back in time and marry him again since i can fix him this time- archetype actually possessed the main character. expect repeating paragraphs, 80% my family dont care about me whining, low effort or ai language. My prayers are given to the author in hopes that he escapes his captivity and stops this depravity.

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SoldatGottes

1. There is a clear use of AI in the writing. 2. The story relies too many tropes. For example, the Knight of Wind sparing the MC just because he likes the way his eyes look, despite being in a war. 3. The MC is inconsistent with his thoughts, philosophy, and morals. Jumping back and forth from being a "good" or "bad" guy. 4. This is a personal opinion of mine, but I absolutely hate the trope where, supposedly, your sword is an extension of your soul or who you are, etc. Which is present when the MC meets the blacksmith. Overall, I'm not a big fan of this story in particular. I'd rate it a 2/5.

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vainINheaven

The story feels slow, with the author constantly reiterating the same points. Initially, I had high expectations because it seemed different from the typical MC template, but unfortunately, it hasn’t delivered. I’m currently at chapter 87, and nothing significant has happened. The author could have condensed the story into 47 chapters, but instead, it stretched out with lengthy inner monologues. It’s been challenging to overlook this, though I do like the protagonist’s power concept. Since I'm still at chapter 87, I can’t comment too much on that yet. To Darkness_Enjoyer, I just hope the you can cut down on the repeated points to improve the novel. For instance, G3 often repeats explanations but does it in an engaging way, so I never think of it as "yapping." If you’re unable to make these moments engaging, it may be better to cut them down. But ultimately, it's your choice it's your novel. I'm just a reader, and I don't have any experience in writing, so I may not fully understand the challenges writers face. Regardless, I hope you do well with it.

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sayMyName123

I have a question for you readers, WHY ARE YOU PAYING FOR THIS GARBAGE? If you have so much money, go donate to some charity rather than this AI slop

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ZeRwin

With all due respect, I’ve been following this work — as well as all the other works the author has done — but I have to say: I can’t take it anymore. With every chapter I read, both this one and the most recent, I feel my intelligence slipping away. It’s as if every page drains a bit more of my reasoning capacity, making me more ignorant, more idiotic, more illiterate. Everything I’ve learned until now seems to spit back in my face for reading this. I imagine my parents despising me, wondering how I ended up like this. Maybe I’m regressing into a monkey… or something worse. Would God forgive me for this when I reach heaven? Hard to say. At the rate I’m going, I think I’m headed straight to hell, condemned to relive the phrases of this work every day, like an endless hallucination — a cursed karma loop for having followed it up to the recent chapters. This can only be karma. It’s a path with no salvation. There’s no redemption for sinners like me and those who still read this. It’s a curse. An unspeakable sin. Compared to us, Adam and Eve are amateurs. Today, words no longer enter my mind. From 100% of the text, I grasp at most 5% that actually carry any meaning — the rest is just garbage wrapped in pretty, empty phrases, spinning in circles with no direction or real significance. Recently, in chapter 855, I had the great displeasure of witnessing something no human, monkey, or any creature capable of understanding should endure: They knew each other. No—had known each other. Not in passing. Not in training. Not in theory. In memory. Every word of that passage made my intelligence scream in eternal agony, sinking to a level I can’t even call human. Madness was all that remained. "I think, therefore I am." Really? Was I reading this by my own will until now? It can’t be possible that I, by my own choice, consumed this non-recyclable, inorganic, radioactive thing. Perhaps all this time, I’ve been living in a hell that forces me to absorb humanity’s greatest blasphemies, disguised as literature, corroding my conscience and will until only nausea and constant discomfort remain. What did I do in my past life to deserve this? Did I kill God? Did I kill Jesus? Did I burn the Earth? Was I the one who gave the apple to Eve? I don’t know. But one thing I’m sure of: I’m doomed to pay for my sins. Maybe it started when I discovered this work. Chapter after chapter, I was only looking for a good story about a protagonist growing up in a world of nobles who were not only strong and arrogant but also cold and calculating — enemies who truly represented a threat, capable of devising elaborate plans, manipulating situations to their advantage, and crushing anyone who dared oppose them. A cruel and bloody world, where he would overcome difficulties, pursue new goals, achieve his revenge, and along the way, could go alone, or share his journey with one or more female characters — all while keeping an eye on the story of the book he read before transmigrating. But what I got was not what I expected. Instead, I got a protagonist who avoids talking about his goals, thinking that would pique readers’ curiosity, acting like the center of the world with his savagery and sword skills. He maintains an aura of mystery I have no idea where came from, sustaining an unfounded superiority — as if knowing what happens in the book made him unique, protected by an impenetrable plot armor. The protagonist and other side characters think and speak like dogs chasing their own tails, looping words over and over to reach a meaning that could be expressed much more simply and directly. I’m almost certain the author watches One Piece religiously, turning something that could be impactful and straightforward into an extended mess lasting multiple chapters. Honestly, a simple thought shouldn’t sustain an entire chapter. There’s no excuse to justify the confusing and nonsensical turn the dialogues took. “Ah, but it’s to make the story more complex.” A story can be complex when well-written and understandable. Fragmenting sentences and spreading them out as if that adds depth doesn’t work — it only weakens the text. The only thing that still draws me to this work is the general lore, because the text has truly become unbearable for me. As someone once said, “there’s nothing worse than not finishing a story, no matter how bad it is.” I feel sad there are people like me who still accept reading something of this level. I’m surprised at myself. I’ve read mediocre Chinese works with over 6,200 chapters that, although stuck in loops of events, are still better written. And no, that’s not a compliment. Thanks to anyone who had the patience to read this far.[img=Sem palavras]

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Daoist4IfHsp

very bad novel with 0.001% plot progress. author only writing to milk money and nothing else

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KIngrn

I got a problem with the MC, side characters tell us he is insufferable when he is in fact insufferable as a readers POV. He gotta stop smirking man, bro smirk 3 to 4 times every chapter when is it gonna stop. Story development is so slow because MC is always in filler arc smirking to a nobody.

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Eclipse911

The novel was good at first but really man? 650 chapters and the academy hasn't even started yet.. I remembered his date with the duke's daughter took 25 damn chapters!!!! and gw? What made it worse is that he nerf him by sealing his heart. I hate that chapter. Seems like a Chinese novel. He could have waited to hit 6 stars. I bet the writer did that just to add more padding.