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A lonely man, lover of manga and anime, travels to the world of Naruto, where ninja life is cruel and is reborn in a family branch of the Hyuga clan, Hyuga Chen, who thought he would die young, received the Ōtsutsuki lineage by opening the system .
Chen said: I don't know how much my sword will allow you to run for a year.
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I warn you that the timeline is slightly different.
For instance, the dates of important events.
I found the novel and wanted to rewrite it here to improve my English and earn some money.If you have some extra money, support me on Patr*on: patr*on.com/Athome790
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I abandoned this story, why? well the protagonist says that even though he has an otsutsuki lineage+wise body+tenseigam+pika pika no mi he wouldn't be strong at 17 like naruto and sasuke, wow man the mc can stay still until he's 15 and he'll have more chakra what a hashirama
It feels like a machine translation and the world, story, and main character have all the depth of cardboard. Let me give you a tip when it comes to editing and grammar; If it were run through Grammarly and the obvious Chinese influence (all the freakin proverbs) was paved over and replaced, I could see this getting a good 4/5 stars. An even better idea would be to take what you like from the original fanfic and make your own fanfic from the premise, because the IDEA was great, but Chinese fanfic authors kinda suck at the execution, ngl.
I can't decide if this is a translation or just bad English. Also, it annoys me how you refer to MC by his full name.
Congratulations on the novel, interesting to put a hyuuga with MC, there are almost no novels with this theme. ____________________________________
Hope, you'll continue your translation. I really like tenseigan stories. Does anyone know of little-known ones? (Like Reborn into Naruto World with Tenseigan)
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I'm translating this because I didn't like at all the translations they did to the fanfic, which was one of the first I read about Naruto, that's why I love it and well, I'll translate it as best I can. You can correct me when I make mistakes
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