BECOMING A PHOENIX (SYSTEM)

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Lonnie_Barrar

great story one of the top 10 in my book. keep going with this story! i will keep reading it!...................................................

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neonlover_1

Hi author. Your story plot is amazing and intriguing. The readers who like to read system novels, this is totally for them . I could not find any grammar mistakes. As for the world background it is also nice. As its just the start all the best and keep writing

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RenuKakkar

I have read 6 chapters. The story is developing well. Stability is good as already 17 chapters have been published. Character design is good. The characters, at the moment only 3 have been introduced. Pace is good. World background is the present time (before the Virus in Wuhan). Writing quality is good. I did notice a few grammatical mistakes, but these did not interfere with the reading of the story. There is an issue with tenses. Mistakes do happen and the writer may not be able to see them. I have started to run the draft through a grammar checker before posting it. The story seems to be a gaming story with all those figures appearing. It is different. All the best.

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MokouFriedChicken

A good start for another gaming fic. Grammar has minimal errors. Dialogue feels organic and prose flows natural. World building and characters are well flesged out as well. Keep on writing 👍

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chaos404e

it is a very good book but i dont know if it is dropped because the last comments on this book on the last chapter are from 1 year ago so auther if this book is dropped please make more chapter because this is a really good book and i dont want to see it end...please make more.

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NormalGuy

The story isn't anything special, a guy gets a system and gets points to buy stuff that can help make him strong, like I said nothing special and nothing that hasn't been done a hundred times before. The circumstances the mc finds himself in are almost always forced and dont really flow smoothly or seem like a random occurrence at all. The grammar itself isn't bad at all but the dialogue is also forced and choppy. Overall, it's okay but dont expect something special. I'd expect in the later chapter to it basically turning into some basic cn stuff where the author is constantly making the author characters only talk about how amazing and special the mc is and face slapping that happens because of a forced circumstance.