/ Huyền huyễn / I created my own system
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My talent can be said above average but for my family I am useless. Six years after the incident that I caused I accidentally created a system.
Now I wonder if I will fail again....with my new power I will make sure my cute little older brother, sister and especially my Father will pay the price of creating a monster.... Me
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In summary, this is a story of a thirteen year old boy who created something (which I think is a system) in a secret library, and with the goal of becoming stronger using the system he created. Strengths of the story are simple-straightforward language, simplicity of author's tone and slightly meaningful story development. Weaknesses includes the misuse of punctuation marks, extremely slow pacing, and the lack of proper characterization. While reading it, I don't feel thrilled nor can I find strong suspense but nonetheless, it's readable. In my opinion, there are a lot of things to correct. Really. I recommend it to all youngsters around the world.
And here is the author's shameless review, To start off I'll write the story's weaknesses. Honestly, this novel has so many grammatical errors I am thankful that many readers still take time to read it. I am thankful because the readers are kind enough to point out my mistakes. I would often read my novel to check, but somehow whenever I do my brain automatically corrects the errors, making me unable to see them since I read them correctly. The pacing is a bit slow and sometimes you can read the transition being wrong. I am working on it but thank you for still reading. The Main character is still a kid so please have patience with his decisions if they seem a bit inappropriate. He will improve but please don't stop commending for suggestions since I am considering listening to my reader's suggestion. That's all for now please do add more if I miss anything, thank you As for the strength please start reading and write them here.
I have read many books of the same genre, but i got to say that this one feels very new again. I love the world building and the cohesion of old and new. Looking forward to the next chapters!
Only read chapters one to four at the moment I'm writing the review. I'll be honest It looks like the story has potential but it feels a little slow. A little better writing style and a faster pace should help boost the quality of your story. Keep it up. Good luck.
was good at the start and looked promising well written, but then come either author or mc ego destroy any hope i had for the story one key plot could been solved so easy but in stead his over inflated ego made me lose any hope for story or mc you could broke damn seal there and then but now going watch ego minded mc suffer and those around him when he could been stronger hope solve most problems I read so many damn book where something simple could solved yet authors make mc so stupid they overlook or skip to drag that part story plot out longer
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Very bland concept. Once again, I don't give out many reviews but this one the authors gotta know his shortcomings. And personally I don't like harem so I'm sorry author. Was trying out new novels but this one was a bit lacking in world background. The story has potential.
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Moment I saw the revenge theme, I signed straight up 👌🔥 Better be good, leaving a 5 star in case
A novel with wasted potential. It was good in the first few chapters, but very quickly the author abandoned us. He writes whatever he wants without paying attention to us. He doesn't create any attachment to the characters. There is a power system with no comparison to understand the true level of strength. I still have things to say about the flaws, but I'm tired of it. I've read too many chapters, even though the novel lost me a long time ago.
this novel is incomprehensible. bad writing, bad story telling. random flashbacks, and PoV recaps that are entirely incoherent. plot holes galore when it comes to the "system".
I was actually drawn in by the title. I mean...that's pretty cool in itself, who wouldn't want to build their own system. Though I was confused as to why to needed to get stronger if we he created the system himself. But....Great job author!!! Thumbs up!
Character is likeable even though he's just a kid. I'm enjoying the setting so far and the story is fairly easy to read tbh, great work ❤️
Ok. When I saw the title, I was like; 'That's a first' which actually intrigued me. Then I read a few chapters which was quite interesting. Although the mc is a child, but I guess I can work with that. But in total it's a nice plot and I'd love to see how it goes.
Alrighty! So I don't really like when mc is a child because they always act childish which they should be but this one is good because I can see potential on our mc and what's more he created his own system which most novels only show that a system would appear somehow but this time the mc created hiw own which is good for a change. I'm just excited for mc beating his siblings and showing them that they are wrong for mistreating him. (I'm only at chapter 4 by the way and I'm already excited) Please give it a try I know most people are tired of system novels but this one is decent I can definitely say so myself.
This is my first time trying a system book and this got me hooked. interesting and the auxiliary made it easy to understand a few terms used. Thanks author
No harem=No read !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!