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Plot hole? Mistakes? Bad writing? No, it was my genius level writing thay you're too low level to understand. It's not that I don't believe you. Maybe you intended that to happen but how would anyone know what happened behind the scenes without any context? Everyone knows there was discrimination. But readers aren't omniscient to know how that discrimination would manifest. A person prejudiced against women could hide information from her because they didn't think she needed to know anything. But another prejudiced person could tell her everything about Ian showing off his achievements to make her realize that she is inferior and should listen to the man on the mission. Besides Ian's files aren't classified. If she received his file then why would go out their way to hide hia information? They maybe be sexist but that's just unnecessary work. And why did they send her Ian's file in the first place, when he didn't receive her file. They didn't even want her in the mission and while they thought highly of Ian's achievements. But somehow they sent Peggy Ian'a file but didn't send her files to Ian. What? Why would those sexist guys send her Ian's file? If anyone sent her the files it would be Captain Philips and from the way he was disgusted by another sexist officers comment it's clear that he is not sexist so why would he hide Ian's info from her than? There's no logic in your argument. Of course you can make up any behind the scenes situation to explain it but no one can guess these behind the scenes stuff unless you put them in a chapter as context clues.

The interactions are so bland and boring.

I wish there was an edit option. There are too many typos when using a phone.

Bruh. Maybe you'rs trying make him three dimensional by adding these scenes but honestly the way it is done isn't that great. In fact, Ian is very 1D. We don't sew him interact with anyone or just talk with anyone. He feels like machine and speaks when spoken to. He is trying to build a friendship with Peggy. But doesn't take any initiative to start a conversation with her. There needs to be more dialogues. And even some small filler scenes showing the MC just doing things, talking about things etc. They done need go be long just a few lines or a single paragraph but that would add to the character. Otherwise with MC feeling so wooden these "emotional" scenes have no impact because we don't care about the MC or his interactions. Granted this is a Fanfic and maybe you don't care about improving as a writer. Of that's the case then please ignore everything I said.

I'm not saying it's a bad or good thing but the way some of these montage scenes are phrased it feels very much like AI generated. AI tend to be unnecessarily dramatic even in mundane scenes.

That felt very abrupt. Also why do people in Novels say everything instead thinking it in their mind. Like the "serum" motivation thing. He didn't need to speak that out loud but could have repeated that in his mind. And same with this he could have thought that in his mind. Besides, because the whole missing them and crying felt so abrupt that the scene which should have been emotional had no impact on me as a reader. And it's easy to make me cry during emotional scenes as long there is some build up for it.

There are better ways to do foreshadowing.

God is cringe.

Pain was a bigger idealogical fool tho.

The only good thing System did was give birth to the Litrpg and GameLit genre. These are much better. Although a minimalist system is still good.

It's the term DC uses so...

As is not written.

I'm not advocating for it to happen but I'm just pointing out that in a comic world where almost everyone is perfect looking. Many people are attracted to Catwoman because of the Femme Fatale characteristic she has. Which she probably developed after her many run ins with crime and other experiences. But without that development she would not have the same personality. Unless the author decided to give her the same personality despite her growing up differently then that's just bad writing.

David Fincher is pure skill and hardwork. He started out working as assistants on film sets and then later got into directing commercials. hge made connectiions by working on film sets and showcased his skills via commericials. Only then did he started directing films. except for Alien which the producers interfered with, the rest of works, both films and television are great works that can stand the test of time. heck Netflix became what it is now because of Fincher and house of cards. not to mention Mindhunter, which I regret watching because there isnt any hope of getting a new season. If I somehow went back in time than one of the things I would do is give Fincher unlimited budget to continue the series.

what rule?

David had a bad time directing the movie and disowned it. I doubt he would care about it being praised.

This feels more like an explanation to the reader rather than something the character would naturally. Our thoughts are usually fragmented and incomplete rather than fully formed grammatically correct sentences.