Webnovel Author: KasiCair - Fanfic Collection

I read a bit further now and I gotta say it is getting worse and worse. The author is still over-explaining everything as if his readers were 6 yo like his protagonist. Also, the amount of 'cheats' he is freely throwing at his MC is still increasing and it is starting to be ridiculous. Every single one of these cheats has the potential to make a good story. But all of them together? It's just too much to be really enjoyable. On top of that, the Dimensional Chat Group hasn't even appeared yet and probably won't until this story is at least at ch200 or something with this pacing. The pacing is really atrocious. This is the kind of story that would need 1000 chapters to get somewhere. The author truly embraced the Chinese Dao of Cultivation Writing and ascended to the realm of Writing without Substance. It's kinda disappointing to see all the potential in this idea wasted like this. But oh, well, it is what it is.

Yes. That is the biggest problem of this fic and what ruined it. The author has a good idea. Good premise. Reasonable and intelligent MC (from what I have seen so far) and that is very rare nowadays. His writing is also great. But the pacing. Oh my Munchkin, the pacing. It is utter garbage. Over 10k words just to describe MCs abilities and cheats? WTF? If the author just thought for a second about that fact and put himself in the position of the reader, I am sure he would figure out where he failed. And seriously, he seems to have talent. He seems to be able to make a likable MC. But holy sheet, he really needs to stop over-explaining things and start writing an actual story instead of a summary of his character's cheats. One chapter, maybe two (and that is stretching it already) should be enough to explain MCs abilities. If it takes more, then you gave your MC FAR TOO MANY CHEATS. It's as simple as that. Just think. As a writer, how are you going to balance all these cheats within the story progression? You are just making the life harder for yourself. Give the MC 1 or 2 good things and the rest can be acquired within the story. Preferably with a good plotline. Sigh, Sorry. I could rant and rant about this but I think I got my main point across with this. Have a nice day.

Mhm, I read the reviews on this story after reading it and this is the one closest to what I think of it so I will be putting my opinion here. The MC does st*pid sh*t and honestly, if he did not have his system, he would be lost and useless.I don't have a problem with the MC being a 'decent' person but he is just not considering the consequences and risks of his actions. He is practically just your another incompetent MC whose a*s is saved by his system. That said, the story is not badly written. Just the plot and MCs actions are contradictory with his intentions and are also highly questionable the second you actually start to use your brain to think about what the heck he is actually doing and how risky it is for him. The dude described MCs actions well in this review and how they contradict his intentions. It just makes no sense. Also, with the current pacing of the story and the length of the chapters (I got to around ch24 or so), there would have to be like 300 chapters for it to get somewhere. Which does not fill me with confidence. But hey, that's just my opinion.