dang, if only it were chunkus rattus
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how is he so good at fighting? bro was a common thief, not a trained assassin, right?
*You killed a level 7 rat.*
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why would he think it's a good idea to explore a dungeon on his own?
Yep, you heard it correctly. The cat, which was eager to explore the dungeon on its own, was now carefully tucked inside my shirt.
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... i mean, he kinda did buy a home and settle down, only to die soon after
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/frienemies
:( i hoped he and the cat were going to be rivals
In general, I like it. It seems like there will be a fun frienemyship between ervin and the cat, and the writing quality was good. I feel like starting the chapter by throwing us directly into a stealing scene might work better. There isn't much of a hook to get people to keep reading from the start of the chapter, it almost feels like more of a recap of his life so far. Imo, a lot can be cut out of it(Him donating to charity, can show him caring about orphans in later chap, his past of stealing, baldie) and instead try to hook readers in. If the chapter kicks off with him social engineering his way to stealing a really spendy car, readers will understand he has experience doing similar things. Currently, imo it feels a bit too much like every other isekai, and there isn't much hooking readers in.
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The goddess immediately jumped at that, "That's correct, your world isn't a fantasy world, but your soul was so embarrassed by the way it died that it ran away from Earth in shame and somehow entered this room."
Fantasy · Santhosh746_
There will be, slow burn. It's not the main focus of the book, but I like a little romance with my action :)
lol
Reborn thief: A tale of the blessed phantom
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