MelBri

It was already close to lunchtime and the Queen was wearing a loose red satin blouse, she purposely left a few buttons undone showing her cleavage and showing off her necklace with a small heart-shaped diamond pendant. Gift from your mother.

The Princess Fall In Love With the Omega Queen

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MelBri

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Correction: "...Bloody Spring was approaching. There was only a few days until it started."

A few days passed and the Bloody Spring was getting closer, there were only a few days left for it to start.

The Princess Fall In Love With the Omega Queen

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MelBri

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Suggestion: "...Spring was approaching, ..."

A few days passed and the Bloody Spring was getting closer, there were only a few days left for it to start.

The Princess Fall In Love With the Omega Queen

Fantasy · moonsside

MelBri

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Correction: "...dissipate, others were dissatisfied with her posture." Suggestion: I'm not sure that "posture" is the right word. Maybe "disposition"?

Wang Zheng left her armchair towards the door, and some were already reassured that the pheromone would soon dissipate, but others were dissatisfied with your majesty's posture.

The Princess Fall In Love With the Omega Queen

Fantasy · moonsside

MelBri

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"...left her armchair to move towards the door, and when some felt already assured..."

Wang Zheng left her armchair towards the door, and some were already reassured that the pheromone would soon dissipate, but others were dissatisfied with your majesty's posture.

The Princess Fall In Love With the Omega Queen

Fantasy · moonsside

MelBri

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Suggestion: "Fine. Then I'll retire for the evening."

Wang Zheng left her armchair towards the door, and some were already reassured that the pheromone would soon dissipate, but others were dissatisfied with your majesty's posture.

The Princess Fall In Love With the Omega Queen

Fantasy · moonsside

MelBri

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Suggestion: "Yes, we've seen the confirmed Bloody Spring guest list, and the two..."

"Yes, we've seen the Bloody Spring confirmed list and the two alphas look pretty good..."

The Princess Fall In Love With the Omega Queen

Fantasy · moonsside

MelBri

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Correction: Use a period instead of that comma to separate out the two sentences.

It was silly to say that the country would go into decline, it would take years for that to happen, it would take a lot of effort for that kingdom to go into decay.

The Princess Fall In Love With the Omega Queen

Fantasy · moonsside

MelBri

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Correction: "Hurriedly, several men..."

Hurriedly several men stood up at the sight of Wang Zheng, and within moments, they already felt the strong scent of pineapple enter their nostrils and permeate the entire room. Extremely uncomfortable.

The Princess Fall In Love With the Omega Queen

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MelBri

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Correction: "...the second of her name..."

"Please rise and greet your royal majesty, the second of your name, Wang Zheng."

The Princess Fall In Love With the Omega Queen

Fantasy · moonsside

MelBri

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Suggestion: "She sighed, resigned."

She sighed bored. "Let's go then."

The Princess Fall In Love With the Omega Queen

Fantasy · moonsside

MelBri

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Correction: " The long black hair contrasted with her skin tone, giving a more serious..."

The long, black hair contracted giving a more serious and elegant aura to the young woman. Every night before going to sleep, she made a habit of writing in her diary while drinking tea. She fingered the blank pages as she thought about what should be written, until she heard a faint knock on her door.