ChaoticMind

Good concept but needs editing. Readable but due to grammar errors, the flow of the narrative is distorted and a bit annoying for me. I suggest you look for an editor to help you out.Over all, still a good concept for a fanfiction and I would like to read an edited version of it.

The 12 eyes Within The Cultivation World

Anime & Comics · itachi1010

ChaoticMind

7mth

Commented

old man? probably a tranny

"Yo, you're not out of those horney bread of yours right?" I asked while looking towards the old man who looked towards me with a raised eyebrow. she seemed to be in her late 60s, she was old, with long white hair, and wrinkling skin.

The 12 eyes Within The Cultivation World

Anime & Comics · itachi1010

ChaoticMind

7mth

Posted

Machine translation? If it is then, its the reason for my low rating.

The Strongest Killer Of The Zoldyck Family!

Anime & Comics · Levi_Official

ChaoticMind

7mth

Commented

thanks for the chapter.. I need more hehehe

ch 20 Picnic Day

I Am Tony Stark Now

Movies · Tigr4

ChaoticMind

7mth

Commented

keep 'em chapters coming.. Thanks

ch 56 The Uzu Vault

Naruto: Curse of the Ryugan

Anime & Comics · Thayerblue1

ChaoticMind

8mth

Commented

thanks for the chapter. I really like your fanfic. cant wait for more..

ch 55 The Tiger Tree Village

Naruto: Curse of the Ryugan

Anime & Comics · Thayerblue1

ChaoticMind

9mth

Commented

Nice! Keep them chapters coming ans thanks for not dropping this novel.

Sách này đã bị xóa

ChaoticMind

9mth

Commented

Thanks for the chapter

Sách này đã bị xóa

ChaoticMind

9mth

Commented

moooooorrrrreeeee

ch 22 Chapter 22: If you aren't cheating, you aren't trying

DC: I am Bruce Wayne

Anime & Comics · God_Doom

ChaoticMind

9mth

Posted

This is a gem. I don't know why it is not in the top 20 list for fanfics but I am loving every chapter written. Kudos to you author, keep up the good work and hope you won't drop this one like most of the good ones here on webnovel. [img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]

Naruto: Curse of the Ryugan

Anime & Comics · Thayerblue1

ChaoticMind

9mth

Commented

Thanks for the chapter. Just a suggestion, run your chapters through grammarly to make it a bit better. Keep up the good work.

ch 0 2 The day the Heir was born

Heir of the Uzumaki

Anime & Comics · Darkest_Desire

ChaoticMind

9mth

Commented

It was nice but Sakura!!! But first of all, the writing is all good. No major grammar mistake and enjoyable read so far BUT sad to say I'm dropping this one. Naruto's obsession with SAKURA is disgusting. No sane man would keep on obsessing with a girl like her even if you put it that the two versions are different. Still kodus to the author, just don't mind us readers who really don't like Sakura. Ciao!

ch 14 Chapter 14