I would say [Whichever Namekian that holds the title of Earth's Guardian has their potential maxed for so long as they hold the title.] Or [the way to link the earth's dragonballs without the need for a namekian as the guardian.]
With one more wish left, [tell me]
Anime & Comics · The_SaadKhan
the normal dragon ball's abilities and would probalby need the super dragon balls
ch 12 clarification on immortality
Anime & Comics · The_SaadKhan
Unless you have a plan to make this type of immortality required for plot purposes I do not see the point. For example you could get stronger wishes through using a wish to make the new guardian of earth's potential unlocked or making a wish directly to increase the strength of Earth's Guardian thus the amount or quality of wishes that can be made from dragon ball's linked to earth's guardian. If you want to give him op stuff have him wish for a biological version of the andriod's ki generators and/or a healing factor similar to perfect cell's or Wolverine's. Wishing for this near all encompassing immortality sounds out of reach without the super dragon balls.
ch 12 clarification on immortality
Anime & Comics · The_SaadKhan
While returning Gohan's arm doesn't bother me since he could have Bulma make him a mechanical arm similar to Full Metal Alchemist. The scars and what not is cosmetic. The tail if you do should bring some sort of difficulty with his transformations or anger control. As for immortality, that depends on the type. Ageless immortality is inconsequential depending on how long you plan to make the story. Regenerative Immortality like Deadpool would make him impossibly strong quite quickly due to zenkai boost. Immortality through Reincarnation would be interesting if it goes through different Dragon Ball timelines or into other worlds of fiction. I wouldn't find it interesting if you give him a Deathless immortality where if his body ceases to live his consciousness continues due to it making it less about being Gohan and more about a SI or OC who was temporarily Gohan.
ch 12 do you guys want gohan Hand
Anime & Comics · The_SaadKhan
How long is the childhood arc going to last?
ch 13 13: It Only Gets Worse
Anime & Comics · Mahn_IDK
I noticed this in last chapter too but shouldnt this be Hiyori not Hiyashi?
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Anime & Comics · ElvenHero
Ive commented on the paragraph where I noticed you needed to revise through the last 3 chapters. One added note is that a few times I had to reread a section because you transfer from a character's point of view to the narrators which is a bit jarring for a reader. Interesting story but due to DxD being the main title, it comes off as slowly paced. I am sure it will pick up but may add a warning for a slow start in your synopsis.
ch 0 3 Red Head Rias
Anime & Comics · MyNameNotIsJohn
The hes and his' are in reference to her in this sentence for the most part and thus should be shes and hers
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Anime & Comics · MyNameNotIsJohn
again not translated.
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Anime & Comics · MyNameNotIsJohn
this is not translated.
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Anime & Comics · MyNameNotIsJohn
Never heard of winhof. what is it?
Weight training, calisthenics, gymnastics, parkour, yoga, winhof, chess, majong, Rubik's cube and the list goes on, basically any type of physical and mental training you can imagine, I've probably done it
Anime & Comics · MyNameNotIsJohn
Gabriel's personality is not really developed enough in my opinion to meet Sheldon as it stands. I feel like his personality would be heavily influenced by Sheldon making the story less about Gabriel. If Gabriel has a more developed personality that we as readers do not see, I would suggest finding a way to portray it before having Gabriel interact with any strong personalities.
ch 0 5 Skipping grade
TV · burakku
This is worded awkwardly in English. It still gets its point across but you wont find anyone speaking or describing a place like this. It could mostly solved by ending the sentence at the word education and adding the word locally before the word renowned.
A renowned establishment for young men and women searching for high-grade education in the region where it is located.
Anime & Comics · Sirvero
Japanese? is the m near your p on your keyboard?
[i am using Mr= San in jamanese]
GOHAN THE LEGACY
Anime & Comics · The_SaadKhan