/ 漫画同人 / Adventure with Harem and the System
摘要
ANNOUNCEMENT: THIS NOVEL CURRENTLY UNDERGOES REWRITING PROCESS SO SOME CHAPTERS STILL IN THE ORIGINAL DRAFT.
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A prompt suddenly appears after MC had completed a game.
[Do you want to accept new challenges that will shock you greatly]
As MC learned about that, he quickly accept that before he literally being shocked to the death.
MC wakes up at unknown place and been explained about his new adventure. He receives a typical system that any reincarnator or transmigrator have been received.
He may encounter with allies (aka harem member) along his adventure and will help him as he travels along multiples world.
Can he survive until the end? Or he died along the way? Let's find out how he do the adventure and the story behind it.
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The image for the cover is not mine, it is from anime "Asobi ni Iku yo" and it may be change according the progress of the story.
All characters except for my own OC are belonged to the creator for that anime, manga or novel.
Thanks for your understanding.
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It is not bad but I can see mistakes in the wordings and after dialogues there is sentences that just says what happen or the obvious and the cliche on this is kind of strong(I despise cliche as they majority of the time ruined a good story). Overall I would read it if you don’t mind being reminded the obvious after dialogues and cliches.
Só posso dizer exelent Tanto o crescimento do autor quanto o da estória. Um desenvolvimento perceptível que da para perceber durante os capítulos. Obrigado por uma boa estória.
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yes I'm your story because you take the basis of a rare world and almost no fanfic about this world, I've read until the latest chapter and I love it. The idea of a multiverse Portal to take his subordinates and family to another world is also good because it can still be made with the Technology of the First world. yes I hope you continue your story and never drop your story until your story is finished.
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Good novel 👍👍 .............................................................................................................................
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5 Stars for just having a novel cover as “Cat Planet Cuties”! (The Nostalgia) .-.-.-.-.-..-.-.-.-.-..-.-.-.-.-..-.-.-.-.-..-.-.-.-.-..-.-.-.-.-.
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Reading this is so awkward.. "*blush furiously*: Manami!!! What are you talking about!!! "Kkyyyuuuu *embarassed*" Reading that felt so weird (the 3 ! in a row feel like a little kid trying to write something "important"..) The writing quality leaves a lot to be desired. Its not the worst that i saw on this site but it needs a lot of work. It may even better to write it in the authors native language, use google translate afterwards and edit it afterwards.