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Meet Fin, an 18-year-old fresh out of High School, ready to make his mark in the world. That was until our favourite vehicular monstrosity ended his life short, but fate had other plans for our dear protagonist.
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I started this as a male reader story on Wattpad. However, I've decided to change it up a little here. I appreciate any criticisms and advice, please enjoy!
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I truly hate the main character with a passion; it hurts to read about him. The story itself is really good and has a solid plot line, but the main character really drags it down. To summarize without giving too much away, the main character is a reincarnated individual with the emotional control of a 14-year-old girl. He constantly flirts with danger and makes incredibly foolish decisions 99% of the time. He acts like a drama queen about everything, treating it all as a joke until it isn’t. When serious situations occur, he doesn’t change; he just forgets about them and continues on like an idiot. Although he is technically 18-20 years old mentally, he behaves like a 7-year-old, acting as if the world owes him something. He wants to be treated as an adult, but his entire personality and actions scream immaturity. He gains power far too quickly, and his abilities don’t mesh well with the Baldur's Gate universe. For instance, he possesses Sukuna's Dismantle, which is way too overpowered for someone of his age. It takes away much of the enjoyment from the story. He can move at Mach 3, so what’s the point of reading? The only time he ever gets caught is when he messes up himself; otherwise, he can sail through the whole story without any real challenges. The only reason I’m continuing to read this is that it’s a Baldur's Gate fanfic. If it had been set in any other universe, I would have quit after chapter five. If the author were to rewrite the story and make the main character less of a pathetic drama queen with a personality that’s all over the place, this story could easily be a 5 out of 5. As it stands now, it gets 3 stars, mainly because the plot is good, and it’s set in the Baldur's Gate universe—those are the only reasons it doesn’t get 1 star.
This is a clear example of the fact that single mothers cannot raise children, they simply do not listen to them.
Pls keep up the good word, ''i would kill'' for more Baldur's Gate fanfic like that.
Really Love this, not only the only BDG3 fic that actually last but also the concept and development is really great, the interactions between mc and the characters are really good, they felt really felt natural and Karlach and MC's interactions are peak too, this has a lot of potential and I'm really excited already by the current progress. Keep the good work bro :D
Why does everyone on this site start using AI in the middle of the story, you might as well just drop it and get lost.
so refreshing just for a fact that it's a BG3 fanfic and everything else is a plus, mc's power setup is kinda cliche but you are tanking it with quality and i can't wait for you to write more ff stories. wish you are ok and once a great man said “This cosmic dance of bursting decadence and withheld permissions twists all our arms collectively, but if sweetness can win, and it can, then I'll still be here tomorrow to high-five you yesterday, my friend. Peace.” (from tart toter adventure time)
A fan fiction as beautiful as the gentle breeze blowing while barbecuing with your friends on a May night. The last chapter was posted a month ago but I want to believe that it will continue.
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