摘要
[ I apologize, but I am unable to continue publishing the story due to time constraints caused by my primary work as a Software Engineer. Therefore, I have made the decision to discontinue the story. ]
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5評論
- 寫作品質
- 更新的穩定性
- 故事發展
- 人物形象設計
- 世界背景
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寫檢討
I read the first few chapters, it was good but I felt like something is missing. I can't pinpoint it but maybe the sentence structure was not in flow, you used nice wording, still there was a lot of mistakes using 'verb' in different areas. Use free Version of gammarly it will help u a little. Also keep it up, Nice work Good Luck for the future as well.
As a fantasy reader, I loved this story, pacing is good neither slow nor fast just perfect. World building till this point is awesome. Engaging story plot not a moment leaves you bored. More I need more
The story is paced well, world building is good too like you would expect of the genre. The story pulls you in from the start and things start happening one after another, not a dull moment. Keep up the good work author!
After reviewing my work, I realized that the chapters were excessively long and became monotonous to read. To address this, I have made significant revisions by cutting them down into shorter, more engaging chapters (from 2800-3500 words to 1000-1500 words). I apologize for any inconvenience caused and appreciate your understanding.