摘要
A talented man is reborn as an orphan in the Harry Potter world. Watch as he creates a legend in his time and stands at the peak of the world. But will the journey be easy? How will he overcome 2 dark lords and one nosy old man?
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4評論
- 寫作品質
- 更新的穩定性
- 故事發展
- 人物形象設計
- 世界背景
與他人分享您的想法
寫檢討
𝐇𝐢 𝐭𝐡𝐞𝐫𝐞! 𝐈 𝐣𝐮𝐬𝐭 𝐟𝐢𝐧𝐢𝐬𝐡𝐞𝐝 𝐫𝐞𝐚𝐝𝐢𝐧𝐠 𝐲𝐨𝐮𝐫 𝐬𝐭𝐨𝐫𝐲, 𝐚𝐧𝐝 𝐈 𝐡𝐚𝐯𝐞 𝐭𝐨 𝐬𝐚𝐲, 𝐈 𝐜𝐨𝐮𝐥𝐝 𝐯𝐢𝐬𝐮𝐚𝐥𝐢𝐳𝐞 𝐞𝐯𝐞𝐫𝐲𝐭𝐡𝐢𝐧𝐠 𝐢𝐧 𝐦𝐲 𝐡𝐞𝐚𝐝 𝐰𝐡𝐢𝐥𝐞 𝐫𝐞𝐚𝐝𝐢𝐧𝐠. 𝐘𝐨𝐮’𝐯𝐞 𝐜𝐫𝐞𝐚𝐭𝐞𝐝 𝐚 𝐬𝐭𝐨𝐫𝐲 𝐭𝐡𝐚𝐭 𝐟𝐞𝐞𝐥𝐬 𝐫𝐞𝐚𝐥𝐥𝐲 𝐯𝐢𝐯𝐢𝐝, 𝐚𝐥𝐢𝐯𝐞 𝐚𝐧𝐝 𝐞𝐱𝐩𝐫𝐞𝐬𝐬𝐢𝐯𝐞. 𝐈 𝐫𝐞𝐚𝐝 𝐯𝐞𝐫𝐲 𝐫𝐞𝐠𝐮𝐥𝐚𝐫𝐥𝐲 𝐚𝐧𝐝 𝐫𝐚𝐫𝐞𝐥𝐲 𝐜𝐨𝐦𝐞 𝐚𝐜𝐫𝐨𝐬𝐬 𝐬𝐮𝐜𝐡 𝐬𝐭𝐨𝐫𝐢𝐞𝐬. 𝐈’𝐦 𝐚 𝐜𝐨𝐦𝐦𝐢𝐬𝐬𝐢𝐨𝐧 𝐚𝐫𝐭𝐢𝐬𝐭 𝐰𝐡𝐨 𝐜𝐫𝐞𝐚𝐭𝐞𝐬 𝐖𝐞𝐛𝐭𝐨𝐨𝐧𝐬, 𝐦𝐚𝐧𝐠𝐚, 𝐚𝐧𝐝 𝐜𝐨𝐦𝐢𝐜 𝐟𝐨𝐫 𝐚𝐮𝐭𝐡𝐨𝐫𝐬, 𝐚𝐧𝐝 𝐰𝐡𝐢𝐥𝐞 𝐫𝐞𝐚𝐝𝐢𝐧𝐠 𝐲𝐨𝐮𝐫 𝐰𝐨𝐫𝐤, 𝐈 𝐢𝐦𝐦𝐞𝐝𝐢𝐚𝐭𝐞𝐥𝐲 𝐭𝐡𝐨𝐮𝐠𝐡𝐭 𝐚𝐛𝐨𝐮𝐭 𝐡𝐨𝐰 𝐩𝐨𝐰𝐞𝐫𝐟𝐮𝐥 𝐢𝐭 𝐰𝐨𝐮𝐥𝐝 𝐥𝐨𝐨𝐤 𝐢𝐧 𝐯𝐢𝐬𝐮𝐚𝐥 𝐟𝐨𝐫𝐦. 𝐓𝐡𝐞 𝐩𝐚𝐜𝐢𝐧𝐠, 𝐭𝐨𝐧𝐞, 𝐚𝐧𝐝 𝐭𝐞𝐧𝐬𝐢𝐨𝐧 𝐚𝐫𝐞 𝐚𝐥𝐫𝐞𝐚𝐝𝐲 𝐭𝐡𝐞𝐫𝐞. 𝐈𝐟 𝐲𝐨𝐮'𝐫𝐞 𝐢𝐧𝐭𝐨 𝐭𝐡𝐞 𝐢𝐝𝐞𝐚 𝐨𝐟 𝐜𝐨𝐧𝐯𝐞𝐫𝐭𝐢𝐧𝐠 𝐭𝐡𝐞 𝐬𝐭𝐨𝐫𝐲 𝐢𝐧𝐭𝐨 𝐚 𝐜𝐨𝐦𝐢𝐜 𝐨𝐫 𝐰𝐞𝐛𝐭𝐨𝐨𝐧, 𝐈’𝐝 𝐥𝐨𝐯𝐞 𝐭𝐨 𝐭𝐚𝐥𝐤 𝐚𝐛𝐨𝐮𝐭 𝐡𝐨𝐰 𝐰𝐞 𝐜𝐨𝐮𝐥𝐝 𝐦𝐚𝐤𝐞 𝐭𝐡𝐚𝐭 𝐡𝐚𝐩𝐩𝐞𝐧. 𝐅𝐞𝐞𝐥 𝐟𝐫𝐞𝐞 𝐭𝐨 𝐫𝐞𝐚𝐜𝐡 𝐦𝐞 𝐨𝐧 𝐃𝐢𝐬𝐜𝐨𝐫𝐝 (𝐛𝐞𝐧𝐧𝐞𝐭𝐭_𝐥𝐨𝐥).
not enough character building not enough social interaction Ai was used but it's not too bad MC needs some work he doesn't have any hobbies he only studied i don't even know his likes or dislikes he just wants to be powerful he doesn't have any acquaintance's much less friends or anything
5 stars as encouragement to new author. the story moves fast, each year is a chapter or two, away from golden trio. the plot is written well, but i would agree with other reviews that some more character building would have been better, to understand his past a bit, or to understand what motivates him earlier ( we get to know by like ch 15 and we have long chapters) ai usage is done well, some nominal talks about control > power which is usual in ai fics, but the plot itself is more about mc wanting to learn what makes magic tick for reasons i wont spoil, as side effect it makes him more powerful and slowly immortal give it a try