I’ve read a lot so if I critique your book, just know it’s just tough love and I’m most likely gonna keep on reading... unless your novel is trash and the grammar sucks
2017-10-27 Joined United States
I was a pretty good-looking guy of fifteen, though you couldn't really tell. After all, because I constantly go to the gym to be in shape, my height is 175 centimeters, and weight because of the muscle mass is 82 kilograms. And that's at my age.
Anime & Comics · Ratnik
I can’t seem to care for your MC. He’s too edgy and there’s no personality to him other than maximum edge. I can’t come to like him at all. All I could think of was that we should go back to the wonder woman scene because that was something that was actually cool and interesting and we wanted to actually witness. Then there’s your MC and ”oh look another fight he’s in”
ch 38 Issue #37: X, Clash.
Anime & Comics · Saintbarbido
Can you just, not keep sending him into situations one after the other? There’s a thing called pacing and you’re moving wayyy too fast. Have him take a break, escape or whatever, and chill out. Do a mini slice of life or something that allows the story to slow down cause this pacing is atrociously fast. There’s zero rest at all.
ch 28 Issue #27: X, Fire.
Anime & Comics · Saintbarbido
ch 89 Ryomen Sukuna
Anime & Comics · JaxWolf4
Just gonna ignore the fact that she cut his webbing with a knife?
"Not this time!" I yelled as I shoot a web line at her and pulled her back into the roof. She grunted in pain and quickly got up, drawing a knife and slicing my webbing.
Anime & Comics · ShihaoGamer
Thank God. We need a time skip
ch 100 Chapter 100 Awakening
Anime & Comics · Tobi_444
First
ch 100 Chapter 100 Awakening
Anime & Comics · Tobi_444
She did the exact same thing tho
Gwen: I liked you but seeing how you even betrayed the person who made you who are you today. I lost all the love I have for you.
Anime & Comics · DragonChaos_2000
You have massive run-on sentences, terrible punctuation: you can’t seem to tell when to end a sentence with a period or use commas to create brakes, and you have several spelling errors. Get someone to beta your story or at least edit it.
ch 11 Chapter 11: Peter's Plan part2
Anime & Comics · DragonChaos_2000
Peter Barker was able to hold up a collapsing building by himself. He’s way stronger than this.
Ever since Peter discovered he had these powers he experimented with them in a random abandoned building and found out a lot of things. He found out he had superhuman strength that allowed him to punch what he believed was about 5X as strong as Mike Tyson. He could run as fast as Usain Bolt with ease and was as flexible as Olympic-level gymnasts.
Anime & Comics · MassiveSimp
Fr this type of ill preparedness is unnecessary and stupid to the extreme
ch 117 Chapter 117
Anime & Comics · Shadow_D_Monarch3
ch 88 The Strongest Sorcerer in History
Anime & Comics · JaxWolf4
Cringe fest 100%
One of the spiders went and crawled towards the unsuspecting MJ, while the other one crawled towards the unsuspecting Felicia.
Anime & Comics · Shadow_D_Monarch3
No stop it
But while they were looking at the skies and Peter was face down on the ground, none of them realized three little spiders that survived the explosion had crawled out from the hole Peter was just under.
Anime & Comics · Shadow_D_Monarch3
ch 85 Disaster
Anime & Comics · JaxWolf4
I see you stole the idea from the daily life of the immortal king. Could’ve chosen anything, but you decided to choose that of all the ideas
ch 0 1 Chapter 1: The Overpowered Metahuman
DC: Superman's OP Younger Brother
TV · Perfect_Genius