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2020-03-22 Joined Brazil
Thanks for the feedback :)
The green eyes came from the mutation. Did I say something diff in other chaps? Also, good to see you around leo, on my new novel :)
"Err... Is not that Mark?" said John, from inside the truck, because he recognized the green eyes that his friend had recently gained.
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Yeap, is a little redundant I will try to avoid, thanks :)
ch 23 Food problem
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fixed, Thanks :)
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You are right, I didn't like the way it ended too, felt odd to me, I will adjust this later. Keep sharing your thoughts :)
ch 40 Attacking the Barracks
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fixed, thanks :)
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fixed, thanks :)
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fixed, thanks :)
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fixed, thanks :)
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fixed, thanks :)
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fixed, thanks :)
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lol thanks I will fix this entire novel in the next month, too much typos and errors.
A few steps from Jonh, Mack stopped walking, and could see three other guys using the same kind of clothes as Jonh, after all, in an airport, not many people walked 'in a pack' using black suits.
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thanks for the feedback :)
ch 39 Another way to die (1st person POV - special intro)
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No problem. feel free to always comment on the novel, I really enjoy reading what the readers think ;)
"I doubt everyone will react like me. There will be chaos, people committing atrocities, and even people killing themselves and their children in the lack of any kind of hope. After all, what's the point of living when you know you will be dead in 10 years, with no choice? Not everyone is a fighter, or a survivor like me."
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thanks already fixed.
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Nah, not edgy. I personally dont think anyone can really be evil/bad always/forever, and the same goes for the characters I write. But everyone has 'phases' in life. little spoiler here, but I think is needed as more reader will probably question the same thing when reading this chapter.
ch 30 Rage
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It was a lot of smoke, even Mark's eyes were already trying to leak water, not cry, leak water, because males don't cry.
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Its not that he dont care for anyone. He clearly made sacrifices for Frank and he has jane and jonh as friends. He avoids to attach to people (without knowing) because they all die soon or later. Its his way to keep a sane mind shomehow. Also, he gains nothing with the chaos right now, hos only advantage its this bits of knowladge he have. if the info spreads he loses that advantage. but thanks for the feedback i will make those points clearer in the future.
"I doubt everyone will react like me. There will be chaos, people committing atrocities, and even people killing themselves and their children in the lack of any kind of hope. After all, what's the point of living when you know you will be dead in 10 years, with no choice? Not everyone is a fighter, or a survivor like me."
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Thanks for the feedback :)
Reverend Apocalypse
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