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Latin for 'rotten bone'
*Species: Putridum Ossa*
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ch 39 Long Nights Coming
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The stats, and classical 'game-like system' are far from the central aspect of the power system and only work off other things, in short, giving the stats is useless because the readers wouldn’t be able of gleaming anything from numbers alone and would only serve to bloat the word count and confuse. Good day to you
You slayed this, you slayed that, you went up a level, you obtained a title, you obtained a skill…
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ch 0 1 Witnessing A Miracle
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ch 15 Beginning
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ch 15 Beginning
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ch 15 Beginning
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ch 60 Aspects Of Energy
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Not in the typical sense
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ch 0 1 Witnessing A Miracle
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ch 18 Desperation
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The concept and ideas seem pretty nice so far (11 chapters), the story seems to set up to be one of vengeance with a hint of dark powers, though, the first few chapters are held back by the constant switches between first and third person, an issue which is resolved later on but the problem still remain at the very start of the novel, I would suggest a overhaul of the chapters with this issue. The writing isn't bad by any means, but it isn't fluid, in the sense that there are some mistakes that are pretty much impossible to miss, which brings the reading to a stop and hinders the flow severely. Another minor issue, which might not be one for everyone, I personally find the chapters a bit too lengthy, not certain if its just me imagining things. If I am not delusional, then cutting the number of words to around 1000, no less, would be beneficial. All in all, this is the author's first book by the looks of it, the few problems I noted are only natural and will most certainly be erased as they get more experience. Look forward to the future. Also, since I know the author worships Esdeath:
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Well, it is a fairly basic fantasy world and as for the system, it is the somewhat extensive but standard system I use for most of my stories with one, nothing too special about it, XP, skills and such, although it isn't very prevalent in Draconic Madness, as with most of my short stories
ch 0 6 You And I, We Have No Faces
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They are alive
ch 0 2 No Time For You
Pestilence: Rise Of The Pure Undead
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