Simply someone who loves to write
2020-05-27 Joined Canada
oho imagine if we end up collabing, and Kai's real name is Xuan Kai
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Teen · Xuyoon
Ooh, a hooking start! My only advice would be to try and lead up to the sudden stabbing a little more. (Or maybe you'll explain it later on in the story too, that also works :3) It all happened so fast, I didn't fully realize what was going on, haha. Other than that, I definitely enjoyed reading this ^^
ch 0 2 The White Forest
Fantasy · Blue_Pizza
Personally, I actually find it really useful how you added all the basic necessary information we need to know at the very start of your book. It makes for some easy access and quick references to look back on, for events later on in the book.
ch 0 1 The Origin
Fantasy · Blue_Pizza
oho *or was it?*
"Ugh... of all the times to call me-" Kai grumbled, as he put his book away and walked downstairs. Peeking into the kitchen, he saw his father in a bright pink apron, happily chopping away at the carrots in his hands. Noticing his son peeping around the corner, Kai's father, Haru turned around and crossed his arms teasingly.
The Tale of Two Worlds
Fantasy · Xuyoon