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Actually. This one has no problems. I liked it.
ch 0 1 Season 1; Detached From Destiny.
Fantasy · MikeWright
Definitely needs fixing, Mr. Author.
ch 0 1 Season 1; Futile Knighthood.
Fantasy · MikeWright
The chapter is interesting but you must certainly fix a lot of parts in it, Mr. Author. But overall, it is decent.
ch 0 1 Season 1; Incapable Knight.
Fantasy · MikeWright
You forgot the pronoun, Mr. Author. "His actions maddened me."
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Fantasy · MikeWright
Do clarify, Mr. Author.
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Fantasy · MikeWright
Hello, dear Author. There's a mistake here.
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Fantasy · MikeWright
I'm afraid that this sentence is quite intricate. It's hard to understand.
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Fantasy · MikeWright
Hello, dear Author. There's a mistake here.
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Fantasy · MikeWright
Alluring
Being forced to stop training magic as much as possible, Lith now had free time that he dedicated to practicing the breathing technique that he named "Accumulation".
Fantasy · Legion20
'Instead I got this cheap excuse for a reincarnation screwing with me.
Fantasy · Legion20
I'm sad for spoiling but no problem.
"Did I~ really do that~?" flustered, Lawrence asked.
Fantasy · Noc_Tristan222
Fun fact too, "No matter what Aura he produces." I think you got it wrong, auras are pretty important. Other than making people shiver or tremble, if utilized properly, one could even suffocate a person with just their aura. Meaning to say, the aura he produced has a high capability that already marks him a potent student and must certainly be cautious of whom to pick as a mentor.
"Did I~ really do that~?" flustered, Lawrence asked.
Fantasy · Noc_Tristan222
A child of an Emperor. And plus, wouldn't that make Dexter look bad? I'm making him a role-model, someone wise and joyous. He never meant ill towards Lawrence. Plus, an emperor cannot force him to do anything, unless if it is obligatory like participate in a war. And Lawrence is, if you've already forgotten, still a minor, five years of age at that. So I don't see any sense on what you're saying. If you haven't learned, apprenticeship varies when the students accepts his mentor, and his mentor accept his student. After all, an oath sealed with magic needs to be said sincerely.
"Did I~ really do that~?" flustered, Lawrence asked.
Fantasy · Noc_Tristan222
He must've been caught up to the fight huh? He probably didn't think of the consequences because he was ordered to fight his brother. Even I thought of it, why Lawrence didn't?
"Did I~ really do that~?" flustered, Lawrence asked.
Fantasy · Noc_Tristan222
Do consider fixing some errors ij this chapter.
ch 0 1 Season 1; Guild Adventurer.
The Chronicles of Jadestone
Fantasy · MikeWright