Some of the sentences were formatted in a weird way and it greatly disrupted the flow of the story. However the use of words in some instances were lovely. The story has potential it just needs a tad bit of editing here and there and it would be like any other gem. Keep up the good work!
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Again with the ( ") and ( ' ), ( ' ) needs to be changed to ( " ).
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LGBT+ · Muthoni_Murira
For internal monologue's I suggest you use ( ' ) instead of ( " ) because ( " ) usually means someone is talking to another.
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LGBT+ · Muthoni_Murira
Ayoo?
"Tsk! That annoying sigh again! I know a where a place where I can shut you up and make you scream at the same time." veins were popping out of Nick's forehead.
Urban · JhiThan_Ser
She needs to work on her anger issues and her attitude.
Camry banged her fist on the table startling the woman. She glared at her really hard before walking out of the office.
Fantasy · Ariel_x
Watch him not remember
"William Amber," spoke the prisoner of a shaved head and emerald eyes in front of him, a young man near his same age of 21 years old. "I saw you back on Sunia, right before these baffoons ambushed us. You killed three above that hill before they finally captured you, right?" he let out a tired grin. "Good job."
Fantasy · AxlSLL
nani?
"Hey, you woke up," a smokey voice spoke by his side, sitting with his hands tied on the beams behind, just like the other six prisoners in the room. "What's your name?"
Fantasy · AxlSLL
oh my god please
"It's fine, I understand why you were worried, but you need to realize Ian Lim, I'm not like other girls." Camilla said with a grin as she noticed the photo behind Ian.
Realistic · wounded_warrior
lol
"People have even gone as far as assuming that he and the Reyes Heir are in fact a couple." Luis said as he laughed.
Realistic · wounded_warrior
Nope I wouldn't want my SO to do that to another person.
"Well just think of it this way, we are really in essence trainees as well." Ian said as he draped an arm over Camilla's shoulder, which she shrugged off.
Realistic · wounded_warrior
There are some grammatical mistakes here and there and the flow sometimes is bumpy. I do wish this was fixed for I would have enjoyed the story more but right now its okay to read. The plot on the other hand is nice and the characters are likeable. Keep up the good work.
What if l am lost in you
Teen · Divas