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002_Yuki_Onna

002_Yuki_Onna

female LV 3

When I decided to become an Author I started making things up. Hello readers. Support my novels: Hours of Darkness, The mysterious house (on hold), Eden of Rothania and one upcoming novel soon.

2020-12-28 Joined Global

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Commented

Unpopular opinion- but I think like this she will fix her attitude @_@

Abigail, who was standing there with so many shopping bags in her hands, felt the corner of her mouth twitching. Her mood instantly turned bitter, but thinking of how she wanted to save Nicholas, she forced herself desperately to calm down against her wishes.

The Villainess Married The Evil CEO

The Villainess Married The Evil CEO

Urban · Pinkyprincess

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Commented

that's me thinking of eating instant noodles

Adam saw the lady's expression transform from happy to shocked and finally ended up with extreme determination for something in the blink of an eye. He was utterly shocked seeing this scene.

The Villainess Married The Evil CEO

The Villainess Married The Evil CEO

Urban · Pinkyprincess

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Basically, she couldn't live her childhood T_T

From her birth to adulthood, Chloe Dawson made sure to give her daughter all kinds of lessons to excel in today's world, from playing piano to managing the business. Lady Abigail knew everything like the back of her hands, thanks to her mother. But in the process, the two's relationship dumped down faster than ever. Their relationship turned so bitter that mother and daughter didn't want to see one another even for a moment.

The Villainess Married The Evil CEO

The Villainess Married The Evil CEO

Urban · Pinkyprincess

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Commented

Come onnnn- the floowww with what she was going.

Before Abigail could write further, the nurse shut the laptop and sighed, saying, "Ma'am, your medicine."

The Villainess Married The Evil CEO

The Villainess Married The Evil CEO

Urban · Pinkyprincess

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When the first stanza is overly relatable- I'm invested.

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A girl with sharp blue eyes stared at the screen and typed furiously with a crazed expression on her face. Her typing speed was so fast that she didn't stop even for a second.

The Villainess Married The Evil CEO

The Villainess Married The Evil CEO

Urban · Pinkyprincess

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Wake up to reality~

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"Magic? What is this? Why does everything feel like I'm in a fairy tale?"

Way Back To Neverland

Way Back To Neverland

Fantasy · InkDreamer07

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Replied to ToufiqUlAlam

let's talk more. do you have discord? add me if you are. 002_Yuki_Onna#1599

I am Landon. Landon Miller, 15 years old. This is my story, I promise not to leave anything out.

TOOK MY BREATH AWAY

TOOK MY BREATH AWAY

Teen · 002_Yuki_Onna

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A&D entertainment

I am Landon. Landon Miller, 15 years old. This is my story, I promise not to leave anything out.

TOOK MY BREATH AWAY

TOOK MY BREATH AWAY

Teen · 002_Yuki_Onna

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Replied to UelUel

ohhh now I get it. Thats such a cool concept 🤧🤧🙂💞

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I did gave spaces in between but I don't understand the hell is wrong with it here T_T pls bear with me.

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Before anyone here starts reading my review let me just make myself super clear that I am a huge reader, It's not like I only read webnovels- in fact, I don't read that many webnovels but paperbacks. That's why I am a sucker for descriptive language and conversations. Okay, so now. Here's my review of this cute story: Writing Quality- I gave it a 3. I feel like the emotions and the surrounding description can be a bit better than how it was originally written. Instead of writing sounds like "uuwaaah" and "sob sob" and "chop-chop", try describing them. 'Cause that makes more impact and lets the reader connect with your world and characters. Then the mixing of povs, I mean it's understandable, It happens even I as a writer did that mistake so it's not a biggie. But how you write dialogues is a biggie, Girl. You are writing the character name at the end in brackets. No lies, I thought they were some sounds at first. And then the fighting scene, it's supposed to be a thrilling and exciting part of the novel, so put the right description there. Overall, what I mean is to try describing more of what is needed to improve your character or the world. Now, no matter what I wrote above the story was enjoyable, the thing I liked about your writing was that it is super easy to follow. In the prologue, you've already described how it all ended and through the main chapters it was really easy to understand the story and what your character is trying to convey, I really admire how you described the town, till now where I have read. It was my favourite chapter. Stability of Updates- 5 stars. The author is doing a wonderful job of uploading almost every day. I really really want to take inspiration from you and start doing that with my novels too. It is really an important part of webnovel before it gets popular. Hehe~ if you know what I mean. Story Development- 5 stars. Go read and you'll know what I mean. It is flowing smoothly, and the pacing is nice. It won't let you get bored to a point. Character Design- I gave it a 5. But there's a thing I will surely wanna point out, try describing them too. Like- I don't really know how to make you understand, so here's goes to nothing. Look at this example- Lyla felt her ears twitch and her tail flick, signs of her growing irritation. She hated being ignored, especially by someone who owed her a favour. "Hey, are you even listening?" she clenched her fist as she slammed it on the table. So like that, I mean it describes that she has ears and a tail which makes her a cat girl. That's what I was trying to tell you but yea it's your story and you have the right. Finally, World Background- Here's the thing, I understand that you described in prologue how the world is, you described the town they live in, that's cool. However, world background is not till there, you need to describe the surroundings your character is in while they are doing something. It's just I felt there was a lack of it. That's why I pointed it out. Overall this story is well-deserved, 4.4/- It was enjoyable and I think I will keep reading. Keep doing what you are doing cuz you are awesome at it.

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Replied to UelUel

It will be our little secret Ueluel-chan!

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