I’m aware of that. Still, a necromancer is a mage. Not a swordsman.
All right, fair enough I suppose. I look forward to it then :)
This is unacceptable behaviour from any teacher. Since you stated earlier the headmaster likes Zain you should keep up some consistently with the plot your building.
Zain's eyes narrowed as he watched the teacher approach him. Without warning, she hurled a barrage of insults at him, calling him a dog born from a bitch and insisting that he was powerless. "Shut the fuck up and be a bottom feeder, a slave," she spat, before turning on her heel and storming away.
Fantasy · 1st_Manga_KING
Can you use ‘ for thoughts. It’ confusing because you keep switching
"Although my mind anticipated the next strike and reacted accordingly, my body lagged far behind and remained vulnerable."
Fantasy · 1st_Manga_KING
Why at 5? Also why is she speaking to him like this. And try not to use numbers, use the word from instead. Five not 5
The woman held him closer and whispered, "But don't worry, little one. You'll be taken care of. You'll be part of the orphanage when you reach 5years old , and we'll make sure you're safe and loved."
Fantasy · Yonaas
This is bad writing. Something like “how sad. No parents, no home…” the audience isnt dumb. Treat us as smart people. Let us wonder
The woman continued, "His father also died. He died months ago during a fatal expedition."
Fantasy · Yonaas
Is this a typo or?? How does the doctor know about his first life
" Don't worry kid , you are going to live a good life, this time " she said while putting her index in his rosey cheeks .
Fantasy · Yonaas
No, it’s never surpass the master. You can trail behind but if you ever become a threat and gain the love and compassion of the people, you will die. The author is actually doing a good job at displaying a cunning and smart demon lord.
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Fantasy · Yonaas
He’s one of the most powerful. Also read “The 48 Laws To Power” the first chapter should expand this pretty well. The servant should never outshine his master. Gifts can be perceived as threats
The air turned quickly to be thick with tension as Zephyr was still kneeling before the Lord of Demons. He had always been one of the most powerful and loyal demons in the realm, and he had never imagined that his strength would one day be perceived as a threat.
Fantasy · Yonaas
I’l favourite it and check it out when it has more chapters.
Solo leveling works because he isnt a necromancer at the start but a swordsman. Also because he uses shadows not bones and uses no other magic. Like he literally has no spells to use besides a few utilitys. Magic swordsman are overused and trash. It also makes no sense
<Beginner Weapon Mastery level 99>, <Spell Weaver level 11>, <Spirit Summoning level 22>, <Spirit Storage Level 15>, <Beginner Fire Magic>, <Beginner Weapon Enhancement Magic>, <Beginner Curse Eyes>
Fantasy · Nilo_A
I doubt it . It would be like watching a movie
"Haa~ I didn't expect I'll be boarding an airship like this…" Kyle muttered as he recalled the memories that fused in his soul.
Arcane Academy: The Divine Extraction Legacy
Fantasy · xlntz