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Stories like this always hit the spot ...
The neighborhood heard the commotion but it was already too late. When the police came Vince's mother was already dead. Vince survives because he is protected by his mother. The police give the custody of Vince to the Ember Orphanage. Mother Kelly asked me to look out for Vince. Ever since then Vince never speaks again. That was the story I heard from them."
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So every time Vince's father is drunk. He's gonna beat up anyone who he thinks is making noise inside their house. But not until he comes home where Vince is practicing singing along with the help of his mother because Vince's teacher asked him to perform in their school event. Vince's father goes mad after hearing his wife and Vince's voice singing. He beat Vince and his wife, but he beat his wife so much to the point that Vince's mother died. She was beaten to death.
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"Hey! Stop with the bullshit storytelling. Just tell me what exactly happened."
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Seriously! This Greg kid annoys me. He has that serious face while telling and demonstrating that story. He even tries mimicking the fight scenes.
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Just my honest opinion here but I think you should put their ages in bracket rather than have them say it...
"In this little town, my brother Vince, aged 10, and I, Greg, aged 12, faced the world hand in hand. Every day, armed with determination and a makeshift cart, we scoured the streets for recyclables to sell."
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After some time, we settle down at the sala set. Looking at their fresh faces now. The younger kid has a cute face while the taller kid has a pretty handsome face. Oh, but I have a charismatic handsome face. So my handsomeness is on a different level from theirs.
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As I came back to my senses I saw them staring at me in horror. As if I'm a devil in disguise.
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Like so
Once the two men are about to grab or subdue me. I quickly kicked the stomach of the one near my left side while delivering an uppercut to the one on my right side.
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It's been half a year since I started going to school. Right now, I'm in my 8th Grade at Elite Sparks University the most prestigious university in Sparks Country. My teachers often praise me asking me if I want to skip grades and be a college student based on my abilities, especially my IQ level. Well, that's given after all I was born a genius.
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Another great chapter
ch 0 9 The Birth of Blaze Castro
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Plenty love the original story
From now on I will be Blaze Castro.Blaze - so that I will always be reminded of how my family died. So that I will never forget how my heart is blazing for revenge the main reason why I'm living right now.
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Not giving any spoilers 馃き馃き馃き
ch 0 5 Episode 5: Level Up
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Everything around me blurs, and I can't shake off this deep, aching emptiness. It's as if the world has flipped upside down, and I'm left standing in the wreckage of what used to be my life.
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Great work
Another great chapter
ch 0 6 Pyra City on Fire
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Thanks 馃槉
ch 0 3 Episode 3: My Death / My System
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Thanks for the comment 馃拵馃拵馃拵馃憣I really appreciate it.
"Way to go Rafiki?" Kilr hissed. "Now you'll tell me to go find the truth in my reflection!"
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"Enough! Just speak to the point and tell me why you guys are here in Sparks Country?"
Blaze Deception: A Villain in a Hero's Disguise
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