voice actor and writer, trying to market themselves in a way that they never have before lololol discord: haru~sama#1129
2021-12-15 Joined United States
lmaooo
"That's how you a tie a shoe. You're telling me how to tie a shoe right now."
Fantasy · Wizedex
i really enjoyed the tone established early on, as well as the character interactions and reactions given. the worldbuilding is excellent, and its very easy to get into this book despite not truly knowing what'd you'd be getting into. i can't say i have many (if any) critiques so early on, so i can definitely vouch this as a good, immersive read! the hard work is made very apparent!
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she's so fcking sick
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Fantasy · Apoqliphoth
of course! i'm looking forward to the continuation of your work!
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i love how despite Matt's entire world had been altered, its still very grounded in reality. i still have yet to read the third chapter, but it was very cool to see that even though he had found motivation in the agility point, his body was literally too weak to get him there. many stories would just have the protag bs their way to the goal, but it's really good to see the pacing the author has used. the only critique I have is really loose, and one that is one that many of us still have to get accustomed to doing, and that's showing rather than telling. but I will admit, that that's more nitpicky than constructive, and a skill gained with time. With where we are now, I'm very excited to see the progression of this story.
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LOLLLLL
"If it makes the fighting stop, please proceed Megi." he said in a flat tone.
Fantasy · Apoqliphoth
you're doing great, Seas <3