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Fast reader love A Song of Ice And Fire and House of the dragon as well as quite a few others also love some shows like GOT and Fast and furious, marvel and DC mainly the shows

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It’s a very good story from what I’ve read with great writing. Sadly the mistakes were to big and many for me to keep reading but that is only because of the lack of realism in the novel I think those that can get around that would love the book and do recommend it to them. Now onto why I can’t keep reading it sadly. First off the child has his mothers last name which wouldn’t happen unless she was a prostitute or someone who has slept with a random person other than that his should have his fathers as at this time only when you don’t know the fathers name do you give him his mothers last name. Secondly they are a wealthy family but don’t act like it but more like a modern one. This is one of the two or three major problems I had with it. He had to ask his grandfather for tutoring when a wealthy family would have started it at probably five on their own. He then gets a random servents son who trespassed on his private tree house sort of like just doing what you want in someone’s room which servents can’t do never the less their children. The grandfather then asks the servant if her child could learn with his son which would not be allowed and wouldn’t ask her as she is a women and for this time period their opinion doesn’t matter at all. The MC is already placing his modern ideals into the story with no repercussions and in an unrealistic way. The mother is still unmarried which would be realistic if she had a child outside marriage normally but they are a wealthy family so would be able to find a less wealthy family to marry her into but doesn’t. Also the granfather doesn’t look for any betrothals for his grandson who would be his heir which is also unrealistic as at age 16 you are expected to have your first child and they are an influential family so they should already look for one in other families for connections or just of equal wealth for relations between the families and so they don’t have to marry into lesser families. All in all other than the unrealism it’s a great novel that I would recommend if you can get around that.

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It would be his father he has to get to agree not the mother. This is a major complaint I always have when people do historical fanfics or novels. Women do not have a say in how a household is run or what people in said household can do. This is all up to the patriarch of the family or the men never the women. If his father is dead it goes to an uncle causin or some other teen family member. At around 13 you can start to make your own descisions as a man. Please don’t try to change this it wouldn’t work or be possible in any way and I get it’s alternate history but this wouldn’t happen in any alternate history. If he has no adult or older male in his family it’s up to himself as he would be the one supporting the family, females can not work right now or for a while still for a multitude of reasons so can not support a family either so if his father is dead all his fathers wealth goes to him not the mother. Just like the MCs grandfathers stuff would all go to the MC when he does die and he would probably be given something to get used to running in a bit at say 16. His grandfather would look for betrothals for him too sense he was a child to further his own buisness and connections. So the grandfather should start if he hasn’t already looking for a betrothel so his son can also get married at about 16 when they are expected to have their first child this was still like this in the US up until around 40 years ago. And the granfather would look for influential and wealthy families maybe even a noble family as they are still part of the British empire and would be British themselves. And please don’t even try to push modern ideals I know stuff like slavery sucks but one guy can not change it it takes time and a society has to be developed enough to end it. It’s why undeveloped countries do it still to this day even when other countries try to end it forcefully. And pushing modern ideals is garuanteed to get the mc killed or lose everything including friends who grew up in this just like the MC is as well like you said the MC died young so by the time he has finished his childhood he died so him as a chield in this world would be considered the beginning of his adult like or where he learns more about society and gets his ideals. Sorry for this rant just take it as advice please I’ve seen to many authors push modern ideals in a historical setting or being outliers who treat women differently or something or don’t do something everyone else rich is doing when in reality it would get them killed or disliked.

His grandpa chuckles and shakes his head, "That shouldn't be a problem, but you would have to get his mother to agree. God knows that woman is strong-willed. Come now, let's ask her."

Son of Franklin

Son of Franklin

History · HydroG3

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None of what you said makes sense and you counter yourself within it. You are also trying to talk about how other countries measure feat ignoring that it is the US that does.

The young man was around 16 years old, standing at 1.82m height, he had wavy black hair which he didn't seem to have cut in a long time, since it fell to his neck and did not seem to be well taken care of.

Teen Wolf: The Singer

Teen Wolf: The Singer

Movies · Fat_Cultivator

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Hard to speculate as the worth of money changed plus the war and he is just becoming popular.

The end result was that Chris turned over the designs and received 5% of the stock in Stark Industries, plus a million dollars in cash. 

Be The Superheroes' Father in Marvel X DC universe

Be The Superheroes' Father in Marvel X DC universe

Fantasy · DreamWalker2023

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Hope this catches you up on most things Jon snow(as you can tell I’m a big fan of him)

This is the world of A Song of Ice and Fire or Game of Thrones. I don't know which timeline I arrived at. The body I took over did not have memory other than the usurper he wanted to kill for taking over what was rightfully his.

I Only Want to Enjoy Life But My Little Sister Want Me to be King

I Only Want to Enjoy Life But My Little Sister Want Me to be King

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Ya no problem the directors were Daenerys fans and they wanted women to watch it so made Daenerys more powerful then the books. Her dragons are smaller and won’t grow as fast as the show and there are more hints of her turning to evil in the books. She probably also won’t get as much support as she did in the show. Jon is the heir to the kingdom in the North which is Robb’s title and he legitimized him before his death and named him heir. (This is a major thing in the books as some people from the red wedding are missing in the books and have his will.) the northern kingdom includes the riverlands who swore to Robb stark. Plus a ton of the northerners haven’t been raised yet like the mountain clansman’s etc. when aegon conquered westeros the north marched with over 45,000 men to the neck. Robb only took 20,000 south and factoring in population growth and the vastness of the north(as big as the other kingdoms combined) and Jon being more ambitious and ruthless in the books chances are he won’t kneel to anyone if he is brought back( I think the author said he will be but he is constantly changing the book he said) the vale will also most likely support him nd if he marries someone like Margery he gets another 80,000 men. So if he were to find out his heritage he would probably push for the throne or will still do it anyway to get Joffrey and the Lannisters off of it and put the north in power.

This is the world of A Song of Ice and Fire or Game of Thrones. I don't know which timeline I arrived at. The body I took over did not have memory other than the usurper he wanted to kill for taking over what was rightfully his.

I Only Want to Enjoy Life But My Little Sister Want Me to be King

I Only Want to Enjoy Life But My Little Sister Want Me to be King

Book&Literature · Fangrove

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None of the targaryens do. In the books the only reason dany did was from a spell and only during that spell to hatch the eggs. At no other time does she have immunity or resistance to fire.

This is the world of A Song of Ice and Fire or Game of Thrones. I don't know which timeline I arrived at. The body I took over did not have memory other than the usurper he wanted to kill for taking over what was rightfully his.

I Only Want to Enjoy Life But My Little Sister Want Me to be King

I Only Want to Enjoy Life But My Little Sister Want Me to be King

Book&Literature · Fangrove

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