Writing and reading for fun whenever I can MMA fan, Action fan and martial artist Current ongoing works: We Die Young Discord: Nomad
2022-07-27 Joined United States
interesting development, with the zombies
ch 0 9 I misunderstood
Fantasy · Sir_WendoS
is this a thought of the main character? isn't everything a thought of his? why highlight this?
'I'm going to reincarnate again, right?!'
Fantasy · Sir_WendoS
i notice that there is not much dialogue
I still can't get used to the first person perspective, but its fine, is up to each author their style
How many days have I been trapped in this tiny, windowless room? At first, I tried scratching tally marks into the wall to count the passing days, but my weak bony fingers belonging to a child could barely leave a mark on the hard stone. So instead I've been tracking time by the regular meals pushed under my door.
Fantasy · Sir_WendoS
OHHHHHH YEAHH BABY! GAINZ ARE BEAUTIFUL!!
ch 0 1 Bad outcomes
Fantasy · Sir_WendoS
This is what I'm talking about, create an emotion in a scene, very nice
As Marshal soared through the urban expanse, his red eyes gleaming against the backdrop of the city lights, he marveled at the vastness of human civilization. The distant hum of activity, the twinkling lights of skyscrapers, and the intricate patterns of roads below painted a mesmerizing picture.
Action · B_l_a_n_k_2167
i like this but maybe you could add some more description to what they're wearing and what they feel as they get closer
The security team, clad in advanced tactical gear, nodded in acknowledgment. They had been trained rigorously for this duty, but the mystique surrounding Marshal added an extra layer of tension to their routine checks.
Action · B_l_a_n_k_2167
Thank you very much I hope to continue improving
ch 50 Protect the idol (part 4)
Action · ForerunnerOfSky
It has
ch 50 Protect the idol (part 4)
Action · ForerunnerOfSky
That’s an interesting way of putting it I thought that meant something like gender fluid or it was an offensive way of saying transgender
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Bro I’m feeling like I’m missing some important backstory, but I’m scared to go to the past chapters lol
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Commas are a side effect of grammarly unfortunately, but I’ll edit it a bit and see if I can fix it
ch 41 Assault On OneNight(Part 1)
Action · ForerunnerOfSky
Somewhat I styled the character after the punisher, his fighting style is also similar as he doesn’t necessarily use a fighting style in particular he simply uses what is optimal at that moment based off the information he has.
ch 42 Assault On OneNight (Part 2)
Action · ForerunnerOfSky
No move loud, he means we don’t need to use stealth so just kill everyone. Also new chapter if you want to check it out it’s one of my favorites it will finish out this arc
"Since we're exposed we move loud, kill everybody who's not a civilian understand?" pacing forward, to a door that had the stairs sign on it.
Action · ForerunnerOfSky
Lol how it should have gone down
"Uhhhh....I....forgot my notebook?"
Action · ForerunnerOfSky
I will take this as a compliment
ch 45 Aftermath Of OneNight (Part 1)
We Die Young
Action · ForerunnerOfSky