Seeking Dao through writing. For any queries, suggestions, or messages: Apprentice#8660 on discord.
2017-08-02 Joined Global
You can delete all of these comments of mine then bruv if you've made changes
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Action · OnizukaShinu
'the' girl makes it sound like a title, you can rather use sth like 'vilian, a young girl'
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Fantasy · OSM_1015
too chuuni💀
"Mere mortal dares to interrupt my sacred time!" She said full-on loud to my face.
Action · OnizukaShinu
use acquire instead of purchase
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Action · OnizukaShinu
but after taking so many hits*
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Action · OnizukaShinu
physique instead of physics
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Action · OnizukaShinu
it makes my vision "magnified" instead of larger*
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Action · OnizukaShinu
remove 'a' before dazzling and space between my and self
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Action · OnizukaShinu
Vilian the girl sounds a bit odd
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Fantasy · OSM_1015
Yoo you forgot Jing and Jiang, too many MCs with those titles
"Those with the surname Xiao, Ye, Chu, Lin, Fang, Su, Lu, Li, Chen… or those with the name Aotian, Liangchen, and Ritian are basically not to be trifled with. They usually have great luck.
Eastern · Wood Easily Starts Fires
Thanks man, also sorry for the messup, appreciate your comments
From the second layer, each step they took was marked by a horrible stretch and an eerie sound of their corpses being crushed to death. The marks of fighting on the walls on either side also told them how frustrated the person who did all that must be.
Fantasy · Apprentice4
There's a twist with it✨
From the second layer, each step they took was marked by a horrible stretch and an eerie sound of their corpses being crushed to death. The marks of fighting on the walls on either side also told them how frustrated the person who did all that must be.
Fantasy · Apprentice4
The novel undoubtedly has a great premise and the way author writes makes you even more curious about the story. Although there are numerous grammatical mistakes that make it hard to focus on reading, it's getting better in the latter chapters. Kudos Author!
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History · _hazel_black