~Night~
Male fox POV
" H-hi I'm night " I said as I looked from Dawn to midnight. I was confused of where I was, but i hid it and sat up further.
Dawns POV
Night sat up and look a little confused, I could tell he was trying to hide it but it wasn't working. I looked up and the sky a felt the sun beat down on my face, then I felt water and the sky grew cloudy.
" Crap! " I yelped as the rain started to grow stronger. I looked around the tree and found a squirrel hole in the trunk higher up.
I never really liked the rain because of what happened to me as a kit, I have brief flash backs of that time but that hadn't happened for awhile.
Getting the others to follow me I jumped up onto a branch bellow the hole.
" What's wrong? " asked night who was still on the ground. I looked at him with slight surprise but that dissipated. Looking down at night I noticed he had violet eyes. Hmm I thought to my self as I looked down at night. I was about to go down to him and help him up but the rain came harder and it started to flood.
Nights POV
Dawn looked down at me, I was betting she was a Lil surprised. I noticed her get ready to help me but then I started to hear the rain come down harder. I was about to climb but I lost my footing and started to float away.
" Help! " I yelped as the flood became more intense. I tried to churn the water with my paws but failed and went under. Why me? I asked my self. After what seemed like for ever, i blacked out.
CREATORS' THOUGHTS 
EldritchLoki
EldritchLoki Bloody hell, why must I torture myself?
I love the story concept but it's horribly written and can definitely be improved.