/ Fantasy / How I Met My Future Husband
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A girl named Wan Yu, her family had to move to a new place because her dad got a new job. A few years later she enters high school she really hates the popular boys and the mean girls but as she going to her classes she realizes that all of her classes are with a popular boy named Xaing. One day as she was going home she got a call that her mom that their house was on fire. Her dad got a call from his long, lost best friend who is willing to let the Wan family live with his family, when they got there Yu realizes that she will be living with the person she hates the most, it's Xiang. How will her life be like? How is she supposed to live with the person she hates the most?
Wan Yu (the main character)
Chen Xaing (the main character)
Wen Ming (support character)
Wang sun (support character)
Chen Jing (support character)
Wan Li (support character)
Min Zhe (support character)
Qing Lai (support character)
I hope you enjoy my story, this is my first ever story so sorry if I make any mistakes.
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Now, there are a few issues in my opinion, but I hope you take this advice as constructive criticism and don’t stress over this ! Every author has their weak points, so it’s not just you. 1. I say this to a lot of people: spacing in between sentences makes it so much better for the reader to read your book. Although this book is not bad in this aspect, I think it could be improved by spacing the different people’s dialogues or shortening some paragraphs into 4-5 sentences max. 2. The dialogue is sort of choppy. While I get the gist of the conversation, I don’t feel like I’m either talking with the characters or getting the feeling they are “alive”. I would suggest rereading your dialogues aloud since it would probably help you pick out lengthy sentences or awkward phrasing. 3. Definitely needs some grammar/punctuation touch ups. Like I can see missing commas and certain wording that could be altered to improve the storyline. 4. Also, I know you said that Matt fell in love with her because she was different. But maybe you should give him a little more interaction with her instead of just saying it in chapter 2. ( This is actually my personal opinion; since you are the author, you should decide whether you want to alter portions of the story. ) 5. World background is not really there. I mean, I can understand and imagine to a certain extent, but I feel like you could do with more surrounding details. These are some of the major problems I have with your book; however, I know you have done your best and that you can’t see everything. So keep up the good work author ! Also, if you have discord, I can give you some more pointers and assist you with the problems I listed above. Feel free to comment below if you want my help ! (*´∇｀*)
Keira is honestly pretty funny as a protagonist. I mean like she's just trying to get through her life with all this stupid stuff happening to her and honestly, I'd be as mad as she was in some of the situations that she's in. There is sexual content in this work, even if some words are censored.