Kingdom Building 101

LV 2

heraldream

Well... It should be fine right? to review my own nove all five? but I'll be honest here, writing quality and the others are so-so but I'll try to improve

LV 3

NikTitanik866

It is average. The grammar and dialogue need polishing. IDK about updates. In terms of story development, it is average and feels very rushed. The scene changes at a breakneck pace. Most of the time the plot just leaves a "wut?" in my mind. Character design is OK I guess. The MC is just running around without thinking and even when he does it feels like bullshit since the stakes seem to be too much to react to them so eloquently. The goddesses and the advisor are pretty meh. World background is kind of the worst. I have absolutely no idea where anything is. Just stuff like "tree", "dungeon" etc. For someone who had just been transported into another world, the MC has absolutely no curiosity. It is all bland and heavily relies on the reader already having prior isekai experience. This is a critic, not a hate comment. For a starting author, it's quite decent. Good luck!

LV 15

Silver_1_Phoenix

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