Okay, so this is another one that someone wanted me to review so I'm reading it.
So I read until the end of the first chapter and there are a few things I think could be done better:
1: There was tons of dialogue but it was hard for me to understand
2: This one isn't a thing that could be done better but I just wanted to say the Caelum is a beautiful name.
3: It was very hard to follow who was talking at that point
Thats basically it at this point! Thanks for reading my blog guys! Have an awesome day!