The Last Moon (Book 1 : He Could Be The One)

LV 1

BishopsNemesis

Based on the three chapters that I have read, it seems that the novel is centered around the main character, a woman named Inez, and her tumultuous relationship with her new husband, James Agustine. The setting of the novel appears to be in New York City, America, and the story seems to involve elements of romance and mystery. One of the strengths of the novel is the development of the main character, Inez. Through her thoughts and actions, the reader is able to get a sense of her personality and motivations. Inez is a strong and independent woman who is not afraid to speak her mind and stand up for herself. However, she is also vulnerable and has insecurities, which adds depth to her character. James Agustine, on the other hand, is depicted as a cunning and manipulative businessman who seems to have ulterior motives for his actions. While he appears to have genuine concern for Inez at times, it is also clear that he is not above using underhanded tactics to get what he wants. The world building in the novel is minimal, as the focus seems to be more on the characters and their relationships. However, there are hints of a larger world beyond the main characters, such as the mention of other wealthy families and businesses. One area where the novel could improve is in its pacing. The chapters seem to jump between events and conversations rather quickly, making it difficult to fully immerse in the story at times. It would be helpful to have a bit more transition between scenes to better establish the setting and context of the events taking place. Overall, the novel shows potential with its well-developed main character and hints of a larger, complex world. However, it would benefit from a bit more attention to pacing and transition between scenes. Grammar: Overall, the grammar in the provided chapters is fairly strong. There are a few minor errors, such as missing articles ("a" or "the") or incorrect verb tenses, but these do not significantly impact the readability of the text. One area that could be improved is the use of dialogue tags. In some cases, the tags are repetitive or unnecessary, and using more varied tags such as "said" or "asked" can help to keep the dialogue flowing smoothly. It is also important to make sure that the tags correctly reflect the speaker and the tone of the conversation. Additionally, using a variety of sentence structures can help to make the writing more engaging and dynamic. Mixing up longer and shorter sentences, as well as using different types of clauses, can add depth and variety to the writing. Overall, the grammar in the provided chapters is fairly strong and only requires a few minor adjustments to enhance the overall quality of the writing.

LV 13

Justin_Gabventure

i highly recommend this book! The author is very creative and have written an interesting story. I am sure that you will be immersed in it once you give it a try. The protagonist is a female, and the story was developed with care. You will not regret trying it out

LV 2

BadStripes

Very interesting. There were definitely some sentences that could've been re-worded, but I love the whole background of her being an alien and world background is simple, but it is great because a lot of people are familiar with New York, which saves you time having to describe the kind of place they are in.

LV 13

Nico_Leztier

I like how the story is progressing and has the potential to be a #1 book on WN! Keep up the good work!

LV 1

PicatrixPuff

This book has a lot of potential. I like the slow development of the story because it lets its readers to experiment through the characters. I am really curious how tge fantasy part will play the role in this fantasy. I am waiting for the next chapters.