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Lost souls: Improving to triumph
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'Why...? why!why!why!why!why!why why!why!why!why!why!why!why!why!why!why!why!why!why!?'
Familiar pain coursed through Veren's body, causing his eyes to turn bloodshot.
A devilish mask adorned Veren's face, as if laughing at his pain.
Being reborn to the world of a novel named - 'The Rise of the holy empire'.
Veren found an unremovable mask on his face, which belonged to a familiar God. which made him doubt whether his rebirth was as simple as it appears.
Furthermore, it seems his fate to attract misfortune hadn't gone away.
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(Author note: For the readers who are not interested in the MC's past, start reading from chapter 5.)
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I have only read upto ch 14. Thus, these are just some of my suggestions and first time thoughts. 1. The Story is well better than most isekai stories present on this platform(I expect nothing less from a lovecraftian story) 2. The world has not been introduced much yet and I expect it to be above average. 3. The writing quality is below average but there are not many grammatical errors. It is really simple and feels like it is thrown right to your face. I suggest you try to explain some of the scenes more vividly using examples and add more impact using vocabulary( use in moderation ) 4. It's been 14 chapters and yet I have no idea, how the mc's room look like. Try to explain the background more. It will increase your word count. 5. You can also add some philosophical ideas here and there to increase the word count. If you work on some parts, it can turn into a pretty good novel. I can guarantee it and please don't drop it
shameless author here! I had left aside my career as an author for a while, so my writing skills have deteriorated quite a lot. I hope everyone bears with it for a while and support me by pointing out any mistakes you see. Anyway, I look forward to the journey before us.