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3 stars: Writing, maybe you can edit a little. Because some of the readers do not read in a PC or laptop and prefer to read it on the phone. Lack of space gap. Sometimes it's disturbing (Sorry, it's my opinion). Grammars it's alright. I don't know much about it well, but I can read it overall. And your quotation, it's pretty rare for novel use that style. Maybe you can use a common one? "..." 4 stars: Updates. Because it's still a short chapter so. 4 stars: Story. Still in progressing. Because I don't know her true purpose and her goals. I will give you this for now. The way you portray the story is great, keep going with it. 5 stars: Character. Well, not a personality that I like the most. But I like how you describe your character in it. Just like Alice brother, Pete. 5 stars: World background. Just like I told you, I like how you put much detail in your novel. A compelling novel with a lot of detail in it. You could mesmerize by the characters actions and her surroundings. Personally, this is a good novel and I can understand how the writer conveys the story. Good job, keep going, author! :D
Finally a good western medieval fantasy story without a system! Also, the MC has it very hard until now, so you can’t call it ‚wish-fullfilment‘ either. Wrting quality: Very good, no spelling or grammar mistakes as far as I can tell. Stability of updates: Once per day until now. Chapter length is also good, considering that the author doesn’t get paid for this. Story development and World background: The author doesn’t seem to tell the readers everything at once, but is only giving hints until now. But considering the content of those hints, they seem to become relevant as the story goes on and not directly from the beginning. Thats why the immediate story development is a little unclear, although it seems like the MC has to survive living on the street for the time being. Character design: Seems good for now? I can’t find any inconsistencies. Conclusion: It’s definitely worth taking the time and read it.
First three good part. The length of chapters are really good. So people like who really love reading will be hooked. Your character description skills are also quite nice. The way you have described Alice's features and nature is commendable. But the writing needs to improve like the punctuation, spacing and grammar. It becomes a bit difficult to read on a movie phone. Overall too early to judge as many more chapters are yet to come. Keep writing 😊
3 stars: Writing, maybe you can edit a little. Because some of the readers do not read in a PC or laptop and prefer to read it on the phone. Lack of space gap. Sometimes it's disturbing (Sorry, it's my opinion). Grammars it's alright. I don't know much about it well, but I can read it overall. And your quotation, it's pretty rare for novel use that style. Maybe you can use a common one? "..." 4 stars: Updates. Because it's still a short chapter so. 4 stars: Story. Still in progressing. Because I don't know her true purpose and her goals. I will give you this for now. The way you portray the story is great, keep going with it. 5 stars: Character. Well, not a personality that I like the most. But I like how you describe your character in it. Just like Alice brother, Pete. 5 stars: World background. Just like I told you, I like how you put much detail in your novel. A compelling novel with a lot of detail in it. You could mesmerize by the characters actions and her surroundings. Personally, this is a good novel and I can understand how the writer conveys the story. Good job, keep going, author! :D
Finally a good western medieval fantasy story without a system! Also, the MC has it very hard until now, so you can’t call it ‚wish-fullfilment‘ either. Wrting quality: Very good, no spelling or grammar mistakes as far as I can tell. Stability of updates: Once per day until now. Chapter length is also good, considering that the author doesn’t get paid for this. Story development and World background: The author doesn’t seem to tell the readers everything at once, but is only giving hints until now. But considering the content of those hints, they seem to become relevant as the story goes on and not directly from the beginning. Thats why the immediate story development is a little unclear, although it seems like the MC has to survive living on the street for the time being. Character design: Seems good for now? I can’t find any inconsistencies. Conclusion: It’s definitely worth taking the time and read it.
First three good part. The length of chapters are really good. So people like who really love reading will be hooked. Your character description skills are also quite nice. The way you have described Alice's features and nature is commendable. But the writing needs to improve like the punctuation, spacing and grammar. It becomes a bit difficult to read on a movie phone. Overall too early to judge as many more chapters are yet to come. Keep writing 😊