#_# DXD fanfiction / VALI LUCIFER #_#

LV 4

lapis

Have read 5 chapters. So here is my review based on that. Writing Quality - 4/5 - Pretty good writing quality. Better than Chinese MTL which I would have rated 3/5. Story Development - 3/5 - The MC is still in the womb and is ranting to himself about anything in dxd in general. His quirkiness is kinda sad, it's like he has gone nuts due to loneliness or something. He is able to to listen to what's happening outside the womb when he is a foetus, I am not sure if that is even possible normally, even for 3/4th devil. The story literally has not started developing at all by this point so 3/5. Character Design - 3/5 - The character of MC cannot be assessed as all he's done uptil now is rant in his mind about who he is going to get in his peerage, how he is going to awaken paternal feelings in his father, how he will reach Grigori and get Azazel to adopt him. All things cliché and sticking to known variables. Not good, not bad. The MC's father is questionable, seems as if he is in love with MC's mother but is putting up a facade infront of Rizevim and other servants, don't know if this personality would continue post MC's birth. Updating Stability - 4/5 - This is always unknown. The Author may continue with good stability in the beginning but sooner or later would either drop it or hiatus it. Questionable, thus 4/5 for current update stability. World Background - 5/5 - It's DxD, literally can fit any myth and has tons of potential. Just don't know whether the Author is able to unearth it. Overall - 3.8/5.0 - Well, Not the best fic but not the worst either. Hope the story gets better with time. Good luck Author 👍.

LV 11

Luis_Saavedra

it's a fanfiction so it ain't going to be equal to the cannon. so their are gonna be different things such as the obvious: the mc is valí not Issei and i like adding some quirky characters . and i will accept suggestions for things to add such as new sacred gears got 4 of those , or adding a mythology just got a new one .