I've become the horror game secret boss

LV 15

yusef89

I love the plot of the story as it’s very unique. In this review I will give small spoilers that are related to the characters and not the plot(unless it’s mentioned in the summary but not elaborate on to my liking). I will also have a kind of summary at the end for those that just don’t want to read this whole thing. So first off the story follows 5 characters with one being the MC and the rest being the group of people the Mc is depending on to escape. The group of 4 are quite a unique bunch in the sense that their personalities are different from each other. Im pretty sure that a lot of people who decide to read this story will like at least one of these 4. I wouldn’t exactly say that their interactions with each other make the story more entertaining but I would definitely say that it makes the story more engaging or compelling, making me want to see more. I will say that currently I feel that the author needs to have a chapter where the reader gets to see the thoughts, goals, and desires of the characters in relation to their situation. Although the author does a good job at making the reader understand who the characters are as a person through telling and showing. Though there’s only 18 chapters at the moment of writing this so I believe that this problem will be addressed. I personally hate how unsemetrical the Mc body is, but it’s well described and the Mc is quite the horror monster. As for the other characters, there’s one that’s well described but the rest are more glossed over but are decent enough in my opinion (but I don’t remember much of what their discription were except one cause that character seems to be the same one on the cover.) The pace of the story is, well I don’t know what to say about it currently. I do have opinions on it but I feel conflicted on what to say. Though the world building comes naturally and is interesting but also comes in bulk. As for how detailed the story is, I would say it’s in a good area of not being too much or too little in general. Characters=good Veraity of characters(the ones we follow in specific)=amazing Character development= To early to say (as of writing this there’s only 18 chapters) Horror= the author knows how to describe horror monsters Plot development= unique and interesting The characters perspectives= we get a good idea on who they are as a person but there’s a lack of seeing their thoughts on their situation. Chapter releases= very inconsistent at the moment and the chapter length are somewhat inconsistent but generally short

LV 3

MarAuthor

(I have read up to chapter 12, which is currently the newest chapter.) Honestly I cant find anything to critique here, gramar is very good, with rare mistakes which are usualy very minor, characters are pretty good, with an interesting dinamic between the various OG protagonists. Overall, this is definitely in my raidar now, I suggest you give this novel a try!

LV 3

Joker333

Amazing story so far, keep up the good work. . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . .

LV 3

Demons_Crawling

I finally surpassed the 50k words, so I guess it's a good time for a shameless author review...or maybe not exactly, I don't know. Think of this web novel as a prototype, I intend (if possible) to make it better and more engaging before publishing it as a book (probably on Kindle or something like that) so some things are prone to change in the future after all this is also kinda like practice for me. Anyway, I hope you give this a try, is not some masterpiece and is still just at the start, but im quite proud of this web novel.

LV 13

DaoistYYrPy1

Promising character and world setup.It seems like there is little to no power system, which i love for this setting.

LV 2

21stcenturyenjoyer

extremely promising, keep it up author. .

LV 1

DaoistrtvHhk

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LV 1

DaoistrtvHhk

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