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mc got more nerf than any character of fanfic or novel ever, author wants mc to have cool power but weak as the weakest side character but this is just one of the complaints about this fanfic, I did not read too much of it, too disgusting too many things that break immersion
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One of The best Top 20 Fanfiction if only this man posted more of the story the story and everything thing else like development Is amazing
Honestly word of advice before reading this story do not listen to the reviews bringing it down cause before i started reading this story i read the first few reviews and almost didnt start reading and by god that would of been a big mistake cause honestly it is a gem of a one piece fanfiction.
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I just... can't 😂 The paragraph comments are morr enjoyable to read the story itself, atleast at my point of view. I don't have anything against the author but, every paragraphs amplifies my cringe... sorry, it's just bad. The mc's too nerfed. And he says his mc has hiraishin but it's so horribly inaccurate. The Hiraishin's seal contains the matrix of the time and space, making the user warp to it no matter the distance since it disregards the "range"(author's reason for a weak hiraishin). It's basically a reverse-summon where you summon yourself to the seal you are connected instead of the normal summoning jutsu. No matter the distance, the chakra usage is the same. I'd get it if the mc would have a hard time controlling the jutsu, but saying that he can't warp to a certain distance is a total bs. You may say that 'it's just a fanfiction' but have a little bit of respect to the technique that most, if not all readers look up to even if it's over-rated. If you want to use a technique or a skill from an anime character, go, make the skill hard to learn, but don't break the power itself. Anyways, the author's been mocked quite a lot in this fic, soo... good luck to him. I was interested towards the concept of this fic, but the grammar is just... sorry, don't mean to offend the author... it's just bad. I don't know if it's better as the story goes on, but bye!
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I hope the author study more about the powers of the mc. I'm still at early chapter but the development is very very poor. It makes my IQ so low. I hope it will improve soon. you nerfing him TOO MUCH doesn't make sense at all. I'm okay with the stamina part but the observation haki, ew. Enel literally covered the whole sky island with his haki after he ate the devil fruit. And I believe he didn't even train that much in it at all. The ftg part, I don't know how did you got the idea to add that. If you didn't know the meaning of putting a mark at a specific target, then I just wish you didn't include the ftg at all. That's all. I hope the story gets better as the chapters goes on. And please no more nerfing as it is really a major turn off to majority of the reader. If you are nerfing him, I hope you give us an acceptable reason/s. Have a nice day!
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a lot of comments are about nerfing and bad grammar, but i just dont see it, its not the best there is but the story is brilliant and the MC is smart and intesting. a lot of the best rated stories on the platform have a lot less going for them...so juste anjoy and author-san keep up and thanks far the good work
ive only read it till chapter 3 but all i can say is your choice for the power is pointless cause if you got the logia lightning fruit ur basicly so fast that its like teleport already and i understand why you make him weak in the beginning so you have room for the training development but it would have been better if you didnt make him have the lightning power first cause it kinda ****ed up the story you should have train his body first then when his ready let him take the devil fruit, like how sabo got fire logia he became immune to normal attack right away but here its like the devil fruit thats supposed to be at lvl 50 from the start became level 1 which doesnt make sense
I really like to read this fanfic and like plot is really good [img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins] I read to this chapter in one go it's really good book and I liked it very much 😊😁👍😁👍 kip up the good work 👌👌.
Good novel....could bee improved more....if we ignore the the first 20 chapters the overall novel is of good quality....good read for a time pass
Please think about re-writing chapter or just taking them out and putting in a synopsis
mc got more nerf than any character of fanfic or novel ever, author wants mc to have cool power but weak as the weakest side character but this is just one of the complaints about this fanfic, I did not read too much of it, too disgusting too many things that break immersion
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One of The best Top 20 Fanfiction if only this man posted more of the story the story and everything thing else like development Is amazing
Honestly word of advice before reading this story do not listen to the reviews bringing it down cause before i started reading this story i read the first few reviews and almost didnt start reading and by god that would of been a big mistake cause honestly it is a gem of a one piece fanfiction.
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I just... can't 😂 The paragraph comments are morr enjoyable to read the story itself, atleast at my point of view. I don't have anything against the author but, every paragraphs amplifies my cringe... sorry, it's just bad. The mc's too nerfed. And he says his mc has hiraishin but it's so horribly inaccurate. The Hiraishin's seal contains the matrix of the time and space, making the user warp to it no matter the distance since it disregards the "range"(author's reason for a weak hiraishin). It's basically a reverse-summon where you summon yourself to the seal you are connected instead of the normal summoning jutsu. No matter the distance, the chakra usage is the same. I'd get it if the mc would have a hard time controlling the jutsu, but saying that he can't warp to a certain distance is a total bs. You may say that 'it's just a fanfiction' but have a little bit of respect to the technique that most, if not all readers look up to even if it's over-rated. If you want to use a technique or a skill from an anime character, go, make the skill hard to learn, but don't break the power itself. Anyways, the author's been mocked quite a lot in this fic, soo... good luck to him. I was interested towards the concept of this fic, but the grammar is just... sorry, don't mean to offend the author... it's just bad. I don't know if it's better as the story goes on, but bye!
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usual one piece fanfic, marine admiral never died on fight no matter how many times they got defeated by mc ----------------------------------------
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I hope the author study more about the powers of the mc. I'm still at early chapter but the development is very very poor. It makes my IQ so low. I hope it will improve soon. you nerfing him TOO MUCH doesn't make sense at all. I'm okay with the stamina part but the observation haki, ew. Enel literally covered the whole sky island with his haki after he ate the devil fruit. And I believe he didn't even train that much in it at all. The ftg part, I don't know how did you got the idea to add that. If you didn't know the meaning of putting a mark at a specific target, then I just wish you didn't include the ftg at all. That's all. I hope the story gets better as the chapters goes on. And please no more nerfing as it is really a major turn off to majority of the reader. If you are nerfing him, I hope you give us an acceptable reason/s. Have a nice day!
Review Should be more than 140 words. The keeper of the keeper of the day of luck 💟❤️❤️❤️❤️☺️😙☺️😙💗😘😉😘😘❣️😘🙂🤠💗☺️😁😂😅😁😓❤️😁😓😂
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a lot of comments are about nerfing and bad grammar, but i just dont see it, its not the best there is but the story is brilliant and the MC is smart and intesting. a lot of the best rated stories on the platform have a lot less going for them...so juste anjoy and author-san keep up and thanks far the good work
ive only read it till chapter 3 but all i can say is your choice for the power is pointless cause if you got the logia lightning fruit ur basicly so fast that its like teleport already and i understand why you make him weak in the beginning so you have room for the training development but it would have been better if you didnt make him have the lightning power first cause it kinda ****ed up the story you should have train his body first then when his ready let him take the devil fruit, like how sabo got fire logia he became immune to normal attack right away but here its like the devil fruit thats supposed to be at lvl 50 from the start became level 1 which doesnt make sense
I really like to read this fanfic and like plot is really good [img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins] I read to this chapter in one go it's really good book and I liked it very much 😊😁👍😁👍 kip up the good work 👌👌.
Good novel....could bee improved more....if we ignore the the first 20 chapters the overall novel is of good quality....good read for a time pass
Please think about re-writing chapter or just taking them out and putting in a synopsis