MHA: The Metal Eater

one of the best ideas about an MHA fic I have seen on the wn. I love the idea and I am baffled by the sheer potential it posses. there are some problems that I think their are with the fic 1. execution of the story. well bro lets face it the execution of the story is not best. it is like we are reading a draft for the original story. we can't connect with characters as we don't even get to know them. we don't understand the mc's personality fully or any of the other characters. sorry other might be able to but I am not able to understand the mc's personality. 2. fast pace: the story has the fast pace of the flash. 0 to 100 in a second. in just 7 chapters you finished 3 seasons. you will complete the story in 20 chapters. this story has potential to go for 500 chapters i think. 3. interaction: the lack of interaction with the other characters. they just suddenly became his friends and lovers. you could easily explore that. like how he forgive her mother in single pragraph and give her second chance. it should be a proper arc. 4. the story feels bland : when i read the story I feels like I am reading the draft for an awesome story. we can't feel what you want us to.feel author my adavice finsih this story no need to change your ways. and when you have enough knowledge in the writing than rewrite this story with at least 500 chapters.

It's ok just that the story feels too rushed, that there's not enough time for character interaction, and the grammar isn't really the bestㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤ