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This is my first attempt at making a novel, I hope you guys like it... Yes, I had commented on this in the past, but it was deleted... T_T, I'll just go here as a reminder, sigh. About the novel, give it a try, as it was my first novel, I made a lot of grammatical mistakes in the beginning, but I improved as the volumes went on. I hope you like it.
Shameless Editor’s review! (No spoilers or plot discussion will appear. This is just my opinion on the overall story) I’ve been working on this novel for around 20 months, so a bit over 1 year and 8 months, and I must say that this novel has been a treat to edit. (Started working on this around Chapter 119) The story premise is very interesting, keeping a steady rhythm between detailed character development, plot progression, action, and steamy romance. The story is really enjoyable to the point where editing each chapter has never felt like work. It’s always managed to keep me engaged and anticipating what comes next, never once feeling boring or dragged out. The writing quality of this story is clear, concise, and has little to no errors. (It is my job to make sure that is the case, so it has my editor’s seal of approval!) The world development Author Victor Weismann has created is very in-depth, showcasing various supernatural factions which intertwine and interact to create a vivid world of fantasy hidden beyond the veil of a modern world. The use of real-life mythology and the way the different myths have been woven into the story both enrich the reading experience and work very well with each other to create interesting dynamics that is unique and engaging. Each character is well fleshed out depending on their significance to the plot, rarely, if ever, leaving readers unaware of a character’s traits, background, personality, or who they are as a ”person”. The use of pop culture and a healthy dose of anime/manga references create humorous interactions between characters and aid in defining many of the characters’ traits. (This story is Yandere heaven) With chapters being updated daily, with an average word count of 2000 words per chapter, this novel provides a decent amount of entertainment for everyday reading. And for those of you just starting, with a stockpile of 777 chapters as of writing this review, there’s an entire world for you to binge-read to your hearts content to consume a significant portion of your time to escape your boredom. So why not give it a read?
The reason I didn’t give this novel a 5stars Is the shift the novel takes from I want to be strong I like fighting to every female in existence is mine I mean the dude didn’t even leave his mom alone and they had a loving family he just stopped writing about the dad now the novel is all about my wives this my wives that we can get like three chapters in a row about the wives just talking about how they love the mc 🤦🏾♂️ I still read it though just hope you get your writing back to what it was🙏🏾🤧
great story with good pace .the characters are relatable in some way each chapter has you the edge of your seat to see what happens next . so I highly recommend this story
Is everything okay with you, writer? Don't mind my English, I don't know much, so sorry. Could you please answer a question I need to know out of curiosity? If Victor were the progenitor of werewolves, would he be able to reach his power level, or would it be greater because of the link that werewolves have?
love this book cant wait to read more chapters the only problems is that there is not enough chapters cause I keep consuming it faster than the author can update it 😀 😄 😅😅😅
Enjoy this book a while lot and also I tried to find ya on Patreon app but couldn’t find ya
This is a really really great story. It just had me captivated right from the very start. The characters are really well written and developed. Well done to the author for writing this addictive book which is so hard to stop reading.
This is really a good novel with absolutely OP mc, if u like mc like Anos and his opness then you will love him. heck later on he even is so strong to negate the power of END and even has the physiology to have immunity to all form of Nonexistence power with abstract and meta reality powers as well. Mc even has beauty embodiment as well, just by him existing, he can green hat any guy and his beauty and charm even applies on guys to a degree too passively (if he were to actually use this power, no gender matter, they will love and worship him). Mc went from weak human to the strongest vampire progenitor to create a new race and became the Primogenitor of the Blood Dragons which is the perfect merge of True Dragon Progenitor (who literally have power to distort reality and 50% of the entire creation) and Vampire Progenitor (who can control and destroy souls and even consume souls and gain there power, memories, abilities, etc) then when he turned to a God he became a true God of Chaos and also gained Eldritch Powers (its still not explained how and why he got eldritch powers which are said to be from an entirely different cosmology [Check the aux chapters]). Its unknown if he will have any more drastic evolution or even make a new race thats even stronger then Outer Gods but regardless it will be interesting as he progress his power and understand more about his other essence. Even as he became a god and gained that eldritch essence, it was shown to have power to create and alter galaxies as it eat them in a dimension which is inside of Victor that holds countless galaxies. Victor absolutely slams everyone in the novel, even tho he started weak and was rash (which is to be expected, he was very young), later on around chapter 670 and above he already has the power to effect the entire planet. and even more as you would expect with the evolutions i mentioned. Victor absolutely slams everyone in the novel, even tho he started weak and was rash (which is to be expected, he was very young), later on around chapter 600_ he already has the power to effect the entire planet. and even more as you would expect with the evolutions i mentioned. As for the mtw cosmology as a whole, we still have A LOT of questions left to be answered, as on chapter 1021, Victor True Dragon form is already has the power and size to hold the entire solar system in one hand and his senses can explore vast expanses of countless galaxies in the sector (the Universe is divided into 3 Sectors, Low Level, Mid Level and High Level; its currently unclear if every sector is its own Universe class space because in a fight later on, we did see the edge of the Universe and the fight had happened in the Low Level Sector but its stated that Higher Sector is just a a far bigger space then Mid Level Region which is a bit confusing. Author could really do a better job exploring this.). There was also an extra chapter which gave us glimpse of what future Victor would be capable off and oh boy it was a lot. Tho i have a feeling that the Extra chapter Victor we saw wasnt even his final power either as it was shown that Victor was still growing and 'Protecting' his cosmology and records for his wives which holds there past-present-future, Victor himself has transcended the records, so that by proxy grants him complete immunity to Fate, Information, Knowledge, Erasure manipulations and things of that nature. Victor is stated to be completely Omnipotent, Omnipresent and Omniscient in the entire MTW cosmology and that isn't even the full power either as there are supposedly infinitely many cosmology which are created by there [Primordial Chaos], overall its insane power level for a novel whose primarily focus was actually romance, slice of life with yandere. One Major Flow i have with this novel is the harem which literally interested me to read in the first place (yea pretty ironical). The harem in this novel in the most basic way i can explain is, its HUGE. Like so many wives and in future the daughters who are confirmed to join the harem as well, there are so many women around mc, this harem aspect is legit turning into the thing author hates the most in novel, its turning into a cultivation big harem Pokemon collector, which is extremely sad. I am sure author himself knows that he did kinda fkd himself over with adding so many women in the harem later on (around chapter 700, his harem escalated to two times and even more were added later on). and to add to the injury, since he will add the daughters as well, even more pokemons will join later on, even tho its totally predictable that the daughters would have joined regardless because there dad is literally perfect and the strongest, and this novel preface that without strength, it does not matter what ur cause is, you will absolutely get shted on in supernatural world. And in supernatural world, something like incst is minor af. also in the topic of incst, yes mc's mother also joins his harem much later on in the story so expect that as well. dk about other readers but i personally feel like even if you kill off multiple characters in vic harem, the plot wont even change since most of them literally stay at the background (don't actually kill them tho, i don't like harem getting killed for mc being incompetent type of plot or forgetting memory type of stuff.) Dont make our giga chad mc a manwhoe and have legit any women who showed interest in him be added just coz they have some faction or army that could help Victor. Victor doesn't need things like that, he alone can basically wipe floors with 99% of the being in the novel who have been mentioned till now and i dont see mc have any difficult fight like the one he had with Erebus, Tartarus and Nocturnos gave him, he is just that strong now. I remember back then in confrontation, he was one of the preacher of gender equality in fights and kills but now seemingly all women gets spared, his gore and macabre aspect of fight is also lost now. I hope things can be fixed later on. I sincerely mean it as a fan of this novel author please hold yourself back and know your own writing limit, its simply not feasible as an author to make more then 50 wives have actual substance and care put into them. Not a single harem novel out there exist which has done such a big harem and successfully give enough character development for every single one of them. Please stop before it truly becomes equivalent to a cultivation harem novel trash. Keeping women around mc is one thing but keep adding them in mc harem is another. Victor as the mc and the supreme god should have standards and not just add any walking pus*ies in the harem, heck even be added to harem doesn't mean anything when the novel doesn't even show any actual s*x and the ones that are shown are so far in between and if that is how you want to do it, then just don't keep adding women left and right. This is a message to author: i dont know if you will read this or not but i am a really big fan of your novel and really want the best for you as an author to succeed and deliver a good novel and by the end you can be proud of your own creation. Don't destroy the goodwill of your readers by making simple mistakes again and again by continuously skipping the actual romance aspect and keep adding random women who really just always fade into background like mizuki, victoria and most of the maids and demon wives, maya, carmilla etc (all the ignored womens who are already in the harem). these girls really need to become powerful and actually have substance and have actual impact in the story. You have to make victor interact more with all of his wives and spend chapter with all the named wives and give actual heartwarming and actual romance plot and dates with the girls. the wives show there difficulty and make there connection with mc and the readers stronger. Not some random 'i find him handsome and strong and i want him to be my husband and done' type of things. I understand fully just how truly overpowered the concept of beauty embodiment and so many divinity that function to further amplify mc paive attraction really is but victor as the mc should have clear boundaries and standards for women. this is truly a disservice to victor as the mc and how strong he is, his wives should also have the same quality and depth. Even now you truly just focus on violet, ruby, sasha, scathach, and latest addition be velnorah and jeanne is also there and anna in the lower end. characters as h*y ones like natashia, aphrodite and the rest now are just background now due to no segs of ecchi moment with anyone in the actual story and all just get skipped. Anyway i did ramble a bit and in the end its your choice of how you want to progress your novel but just know these are your prevalent shortcomings when it comes to romance and harem aspect of the story which you had initially a**ed pre 500 chapters mind you. its not like you don't know how to write romance, even though even earlier like 300 chapter wasnt what i would call perfect romance plot but it was still better then what shallow wives vic is getting, like amaterasu and the rest, they all are basically equivalent to gold diggers of modern world, victor is the best, strong, handsome, wealthy so they want him which is kinda sad. i always get the feeling like, if victor were to ever lose his status of what he has right now, majority of his new wives would just leave him since they were literally attracted to his overall status and power and beauty. In reality i would have given this ovel like 4-4.2 but i will just give it a 5 coz in the end this is still one of my fav novel and i want it to do well.
question before I get into this novel will he ever have any more wives or relations with any girls outside of his 3 wives cause if so I cant read this series
I have a stupid idea, why not make Vitor and Anna's daughter end up with Leon, yeah double ntr from father to son and from son to father, boom
Reveal Spoiler
AAGHHGGHHHH! This book is a curse! DON'T READ IT! Now don't get me wrong, the problem isn't that its bad, the problem is that it is too good! I can't read any other book with interest now! I don't know what, but it has some sort of charm to it. Well whatever, just don't read it.
This is my first attempt at making a novel, I hope you guys like it... Yes, I had commented on this in the past, but it was deleted... T_T, I'll just go here as a reminder, sigh. About the novel, give it a try, as it was my first novel, I made a lot of grammatical mistakes in the beginning, but I improved as the volumes went on. I hope you like it.
Shameless Editor’s review! (No spoilers or plot discussion will appear. This is just my opinion on the overall story) I’ve been working on this novel for around 20 months, so a bit over 1 year and 8 months, and I must say that this novel has been a treat to edit. (Started working on this around Chapter 119) The story premise is very interesting, keeping a steady rhythm between detailed character development, plot progression, action, and steamy romance. The story is really enjoyable to the point where editing each chapter has never felt like work. It’s always managed to keep me engaged and anticipating what comes next, never once feeling boring or dragged out. The writing quality of this story is clear, concise, and has little to no errors. (It is my job to make sure that is the case, so it has my editor’s seal of approval!) The world development Author Victor Weismann has created is very in-depth, showcasing various supernatural factions which intertwine and interact to create a vivid world of fantasy hidden beyond the veil of a modern world. The use of real-life mythology and the way the different myths have been woven into the story both enrich the reading experience and work very well with each other to create interesting dynamics that is unique and engaging. Each character is well fleshed out depending on their significance to the plot, rarely, if ever, leaving readers unaware of a character’s traits, background, personality, or who they are as a ”person”. The use of pop culture and a healthy dose of anime/manga references create humorous interactions between characters and aid in defining many of the characters’ traits. (This story is Yandere heaven) With chapters being updated daily, with an average word count of 2000 words per chapter, this novel provides a decent amount of entertainment for everyday reading. And for those of you just starting, with a stockpile of 777 chapters as of writing this review, there’s an entire world for you to binge-read to your hearts content to consume a significant portion of your time to escape your boredom. So why not give it a read?
The reason I didn’t give this novel a 5stars Is the shift the novel takes from I want to be strong I like fighting to every female in existence is mine I mean the dude didn’t even leave his mom alone and they had a loving family he just stopped writing about the dad now the novel is all about my wives this my wives that we can get like three chapters in a row about the wives just talking about how they love the mc 🤦🏾♂️ I still read it though just hope you get your writing back to what it was🙏🏾🤧
great story with good pace .the characters are relatable in some way each chapter has you the edge of your seat to see what happens next . so I highly recommend this story
Is everything okay with you, writer? Don't mind my English, I don't know much, so sorry. Could you please answer a question I need to know out of curiosity? If Victor were the progenitor of werewolves, would he be able to reach his power level, or would it be greater because of the link that werewolves have?
love this book cant wait to read more chapters the only problems is that there is not enough chapters cause I keep consuming it faster than the author can update it 😀 😄 😅😅😅
Enjoy this book a while lot and also I tried to find ya on Patreon app but couldn’t find ya
This is a really really great story. It just had me captivated right from the very start. The characters are really well written and developed. Well done to the author for writing this addictive book which is so hard to stop reading.
This is really a good novel with absolutely OP mc, if u like mc like Anos and his opness then you will love him. heck later on he even is so strong to negate the power of END and even has the physiology to have immunity to all form of Nonexistence power with abstract and meta reality powers as well. Mc even has beauty embodiment as well, just by him existing, he can green hat any guy and his beauty and charm even applies on guys to a degree too passively (if he were to actually use this power, no gender matter, they will love and worship him). Mc went from weak human to the strongest vampire progenitor to create a new race and became the Primogenitor of the Blood Dragons which is the perfect merge of True Dragon Progenitor (who literally have power to distort reality and 50% of the entire creation) and Vampire Progenitor (who can control and destroy souls and even consume souls and gain there power, memories, abilities, etc) then when he turned to a God he became a true God of Chaos and also gained Eldritch Powers (its still not explained how and why he got eldritch powers which are said to be from an entirely different cosmology [Check the aux chapters]). Its unknown if he will have any more drastic evolution or even make a new race thats even stronger then Outer Gods but regardless it will be interesting as he progress his power and understand more about his other essence. Even as he became a god and gained that eldritch essence, it was shown to have power to create and alter galaxies as it eat them in a dimension which is inside of Victor that holds countless galaxies. Victor absolutely slams everyone in the novel, even tho he started weak and was rash (which is to be expected, he was very young), later on around chapter 670 and above he already has the power to effect the entire planet. and even more as you would expect with the evolutions i mentioned. Victor absolutely slams everyone in the novel, even tho he started weak and was rash (which is to be expected, he was very young), later on around chapter 600_ he already has the power to effect the entire planet. and even more as you would expect with the evolutions i mentioned. As for the mtw cosmology as a whole, we still have A LOT of questions left to be answered, as on chapter 1021, Victor True Dragon form is already has the power and size to hold the entire solar system in one hand and his senses can explore vast expanses of countless galaxies in the sector (the Universe is divided into 3 Sectors, Low Level, Mid Level and High Level; its currently unclear if every sector is its own Universe class space because in a fight later on, we did see the edge of the Universe and the fight had happened in the Low Level Sector but its stated that Higher Sector is just a a far bigger space then Mid Level Region which is a bit confusing. Author could really do a better job exploring this.). There was also an extra chapter which gave us glimpse of what future Victor would be capable off and oh boy it was a lot. Tho i have a feeling that the Extra chapter Victor we saw wasnt even his final power either as it was shown that Victor was still growing and 'Protecting' his cosmology and records for his wives which holds there past-present-future, Victor himself has transcended the records, so that by proxy grants him complete immunity to Fate, Information, Knowledge, Erasure manipulations and things of that nature. Victor is stated to be completely Omnipotent, Omnipresent and Omniscient in the entire MTW cosmology and that isn't even the full power either as there are supposedly infinitely many cosmology which are created by there [Primordial Chaos], overall its insane power level for a novel whose primarily focus was actually romance, slice of life with yandere. One Major Flow i have with this novel is the harem which literally interested me to read in the first place (yea pretty ironical). The harem in this novel in the most basic way i can explain is, its HUGE. Like so many wives and in future the daughters who are confirmed to join the harem as well, there are so many women around mc, this harem aspect is legit turning into the thing author hates the most in novel, its turning into a cultivation big harem Pokemon collector, which is extremely sad. I am sure author himself knows that he did kinda fkd himself over with adding so many women in the harem later on (around chapter 700, his harem escalated to two times and even more were added later on). and to add to the injury, since he will add the daughters as well, even more pokemons will join later on, even tho its totally predictable that the daughters would have joined regardless because there dad is literally perfect and the strongest, and this novel preface that without strength, it does not matter what ur cause is, you will absolutely get shted on in supernatural world. And in supernatural world, something like incst is minor af. also in the topic of incst, yes mc's mother also joins his harem much later on in the story so expect that as well. dk about other readers but i personally feel like even if you kill off multiple characters in vic harem, the plot wont even change since most of them literally stay at the background (don't actually kill them tho, i don't like harem getting killed for mc being incompetent type of plot or forgetting memory type of stuff.) Dont make our giga chad mc a manwhoe and have legit any women who showed interest in him be added just coz they have some faction or army that could help Victor. Victor doesn't need things like that, he alone can basically wipe floors with 99% of the being in the novel who have been mentioned till now and i dont see mc have any difficult fight like the one he had with Erebus, Tartarus and Nocturnos gave him, he is just that strong now. I remember back then in confrontation, he was one of the preacher of gender equality in fights and kills but now seemingly all women gets spared, his gore and macabre aspect of fight is also lost now. I hope things can be fixed later on. I sincerely mean it as a fan of this novel author please hold yourself back and know your own writing limit, its simply not feasible as an author to make more then 50 wives have actual substance and care put into them. Not a single harem novel out there exist which has done such a big harem and successfully give enough character development for every single one of them. Please stop before it truly becomes equivalent to a cultivation harem novel trash. Keeping women around mc is one thing but keep adding them in mc harem is another. Victor as the mc and the supreme god should have standards and not just add any walking pus*ies in the harem, heck even be added to harem doesn't mean anything when the novel doesn't even show any actual s*x and the ones that are shown are so far in between and if that is how you want to do it, then just don't keep adding women left and right. This is a message to author: i dont know if you will read this or not but i am a really big fan of your novel and really want the best for you as an author to succeed and deliver a good novel and by the end you can be proud of your own creation. Don't destroy the goodwill of your readers by making simple mistakes again and again by continuously skipping the actual romance aspect and keep adding random women who really just always fade into background like mizuki, victoria and most of the maids and demon wives, maya, carmilla etc (all the ignored womens who are already in the harem). these girls really need to become powerful and actually have substance and have actual impact in the story. You have to make victor interact more with all of his wives and spend chapter with all the named wives and give actual heartwarming and actual romance plot and dates with the girls. the wives show there difficulty and make there connection with mc and the readers stronger. Not some random 'i find him handsome and strong and i want him to be my husband and done' type of things. I understand fully just how truly overpowered the concept of beauty embodiment and so many divinity that function to further amplify mc paive attraction really is but victor as the mc should have clear boundaries and standards for women. this is truly a disservice to victor as the mc and how strong he is, his wives should also have the same quality and depth. Even now you truly just focus on violet, ruby, sasha, scathach, and latest addition be velnorah and jeanne is also there and anna in the lower end. characters as h*y ones like natashia, aphrodite and the rest now are just background now due to no segs of ecchi moment with anyone in the actual story and all just get skipped. Anyway i did ramble a bit and in the end its your choice of how you want to progress your novel but just know these are your prevalent shortcomings when it comes to romance and harem aspect of the story which you had initially a**ed pre 500 chapters mind you. its not like you don't know how to write romance, even though even earlier like 300 chapter wasnt what i would call perfect romance plot but it was still better then what shallow wives vic is getting, like amaterasu and the rest, they all are basically equivalent to gold diggers of modern world, victor is the best, strong, handsome, wealthy so they want him which is kinda sad. i always get the feeling like, if victor were to ever lose his status of what he has right now, majority of his new wives would just leave him since they were literally attracted to his overall status and power and beauty. In reality i would have given this ovel like 4-4.2 but i will just give it a 5 coz in the end this is still one of my fav novel and i want it to do well.
question before I get into this novel will he ever have any more wives or relations with any girls outside of his 3 wives cause if so I cant read this series
I have a stupid idea, why not make Vitor and Anna's daughter end up with Leon, yeah double ntr from father to son and from son to father, boom
Reveal Spoiler
AAGHHGGHHHH! This book is a curse! DON'T READ IT! Now don't get me wrong, the problem isn't that its bad, the problem is that it is too good! I can't read any other book with interest now! I don't know what, but it has some sort of charm to it. Well whatever, just don't read it.