My wife is a goddess and im a soloist gamer.

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Salmon_El_Solomon

I do not seek to offend or insult anyone, it is my point of view of the novel. Ok, for starters the whole "player" thing and his early story is a blatant copy of solo leveling. The MC is a simp for his goddess "wife" that he only met 10s before. The system forces the MC to do things. The interaction between MC and the people around him sucks. The system is horribly developed. If I had to rate this on a scale of 1-10 it would be: World development: 3.5 Character development: 2 Story development: 4 summary of the first 10 chapters: Mc is a total newbie, he gets into a portal and tries to clear it, in the end he enters a room only as "bait", he is betrayed and dies. He revives and has a system (The system provides him with a key to a portal) The system gives him a training mission and if he doesn't do it he will be punished. He enters the portal that the system gives him. The system sends him on a "suicide" mission, the mc survives. They give 2 options to the mc to leave or stay to continue the dungeon. When he tries to leave, the system tells him that he will die if he leaves... He enters the boss room, it turns out to be the same one where he was betrayed. a portal appears from which a goddess emerges. They kiss somehow and end up "married". the mc takes the goddess to her house. the mc starts acting like a simp for the goddess. The goddess is apparently a tsundere. The goddess and the mc clear a portal. so that they understand the simp level of the mc by the goddess, in chapter 10: The goddess has a romantic date with another man, the mc finds out about her and the only thing he tells her is if she wants to have a date with him... I read half the novel looking for it to improve but it didn't. Honestly if this were a fanfic it would be passable. because I dare say that this is inspired by 3-4 or more Korean manga. I say the part that can be inspired by more than 4 because as I said I only read half of the current chapters 80 chapter

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Moonwriting

Okay ..so far I read the first chapter and find the storyline is quite captive....love the way the author builds some interesting and intriguing characters..sure going to read more

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Tiff_Lin

An amazing story, I will definitely read more to see out it goes.

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THE_GOAT_HIMSELF

amazing story that deserves more credit in my opinion

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Floxy_Belle

So far, I'm loving it! The first chapter is very captivating and thrilling. Good job author 👍

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THE_GOAT_HIMSELF

Read the first two chapters so far and I love where the story is going keep up the good work

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Dofser

Just barely he arrived back inside his mansion. When suddenly he was devoured once more by a massive portal. Then he shouted not again. This time, he was send in massive desert. The wind breeze of the hot air and the tiny bits of dusts from the sand touches jaejins body. Then all of a sudden an earthquake appeared and all of the sand behind his foor started to tremble. Unable to see what was coming due to the dust of the sand, a horseman with a glaive suddenly striked at him. Luckily jaejins gauntlet turned into a shield and the horseman falls into the ground. To jaejins surprise it was not just one horse man, but a cavalry of ancient horseman with medieval weapons on their hands. Spears were sent to him being thrust by several horseman. Meanwhile another rumbling noise from his left resounded. Then several cavalry of horseback raider clashed into the desert. Caught in between the clash, jaejin had to fight left and right immediately sending the horseman into bits, not the raider but the horse instead. Then right after the clash and after their horse was slained by the direct contact. Several foot soldiers with silver broadsword clashed together and the air in the entire field was covered with red blood mist. Jaejin in between does not have any allies nor foes but caught in between the clash of the cavalry and the fight of the two side, he has to do something out of it and with his bare fist, he was once again was bloodied with blood. Several foot soldiers send their sword, thrusting it directly into jaejins body. Unknown to them, jaejins armour is far more advanced and is not just a mithrill, it comes from the solid ore coming from the millendrums earths crust. Forged by the master forger of the circlet of fire. To his surprise he cannot even understanf their words. So he adjusted his smart watch and suddenly he was surprised. Then he wore his smart glasses to prevent his eyesight from being blinded because of the sand and the mist of blood. "Ancient china?" Then he adjusted his earings and shouted "Are you from the kingdom of Qin?". Then thanks to his earings it was immediately translated into ancient chinese linguistic. Then several foot soldier from the qins side shouted and defended him saying "Ally... he is one of us." Then several foot soldier from the army of qin immediately stopped attacking him and instead continued their clash with the other foes. Jaejin then said "Thanks God" Then with his new ally, he followed them and joined their battalion as one of the foot soldier. Like the other foot soldier they are directlt send into an in fight, bloody and merciless fight. He could see several mists of blood hovering above him. Since jaejin is trained was already forged in battle he immediately destroyed his own enemy. Thanks to his armour set and some tricky magnetic field. None of the current weaponry of the ancient chinese civilisation could cope up with his technologically enhanced suit. Thanks god he is in Qins side. The whole army of qin wiped out their enemy in an hour of bloodied fight then their general who was commanding them shouted "Victory for the Qin" and the Qin soldier immediately responded with a loud roar. They then pilaged their enemies body, and took the silvers and gold that they have. They then took the corpse of the dead and pilled it in one place to burn them into ashes. After several hours of doing as their general asked, they were put to rest. Jaejin then asked to his mate near him "So where are we headed now?". Then the foot soldier said while wiping his bloodied face with a cotton said "I guess, we are going to seige one of the nearest kingdom of Han. It was commanded by none other than the war of god, King Sho." Then jaejin took a glimpse of his memory and he was clueless of who king sho is. Then a system announcement appear. "Assist the army of Qin in their seige of the Kingdom of Han" then jaejin said "Accept". Then jaejin mingled with the rest of them and just like a footsoldier is, he marched unto the hot fiery desert under the hot and scorching sun. Thanks to his outfit he was able to cope up with it. Unknown to the rest of the foot soldier, jaejins armour was in a camouflage. In other words it immediately adjusted in whatever the other foot soldiers clothes is. So he looks like one of them, he wore a ruggy and old hard iron chestplate. Though he looks admirable and his skin is far beyond to anyone around him which are covered with scars, but due to his armour and suit he was easily recognized as foot soldier of qin. After resting for an hour, with a spear on his right hand and a wooden shield on his left, he marched together with the rest of the militia. Then with his mates near him, they went into another kingdoms seige. Then their general ordered them to charge and like wise, jaejin followed the general and fight the army of han with his spear and shield. The fight went even more brutal and to his surprise, most of his mates are currently being slained. Then an earth shattering sound of galloping horses welcomed them with a glaive strike. When suddenly his little trick helped him. Then seeing that most of the qin soldiers are being devoured by the hans army, jaejin then took his resolve and single handedly took the turning point. He saw the general of the qin being slained cut into two with a glaive and the last person standing into the whole army was him. Then suddenly he was surrounded by lots of horseman from the hans army. Never did they know that jaejin is a not one of their kind. Thus a magic show happened and with his three shadow clone he activated his permanent invisibility skill. Then a magic show appeared, several heads from the hans army starts to fly into the air. He then started a brutal slaughter right inside the territory of han. Several foot soldiers who saw such tragic event thought that it was a just sharp whirlwind, never did they know that it was jaejins and his clones casually killing the whole army of Han. Night time falls, and jaejin and his clones were at the top of the Hans fortress wall. Behind him were several dead body of a corpse from the Hans Kingdom. He brutally murdered anyone from it and then he raised the Qins Flag on the top ofnthe fortress. Raising the Qins Flag sends a message from far away that the Qin successfully subjugated one of the Hans territory. Then the messenger saw the Qins flag and he went straight to the Kingdom of Qin with a great news saying "One of their seige was successful". Jaejin then went down from the wall and he immediately went out of the kingdoms fortress. He took some of silver and gold coins just incase he needs it. Then just like a renegade warrior, he roams the silent and harsh desert from the ancient china alone, wearing the armour of the Qins army. Unknown to him, he did never realized, that his black knife tattoo was silently devouring all of the blood that was spilled into the battlefield and it starts to change its color from black to gold.

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JALLEN

This concept of the story is quite good but I am having trouble reading it because of how the paragraphs, you should go read some of the top novels to analyze how they do it. Keep going! P.S: I think you should change the cover, it would attract more people.

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AI380

I read the first three chapters and the latest chapters and to be honest, I am not a big fan of gaming stories but the concept of this story is good and the concepts are somewhat clear. I can notice that this writer knows exactly what they want to write. However, the way how some paragraphs are presented is a bit messy and might be confusing for some readers. I would suggest the writer separate dialogues from narrations in different paragraphs. Keep it up! And keep improving!

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Vimbai_Murindagomo

I found myself enjoying the build up of the story. The book has pace and draws in the writer with the idea that there is something going on here and the writer feels to drawn to want to keep reading to understand what that is. Good job writer.

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SalomeTadala

It could use some more backstory and more detail, the actual characters are well made, however, when writing a sci-fi novel it’s important to throw hints at the reader just like movies throw hint a throughout episodes. I enjoyed the read, keep going there’s a lot of potential here!!