SHADOW MARVEL

LV 2

Nandish_Lukhi_7667

Bro , please Improve writting quality.. it’s hard to read more than 5 chapters.. Bro , please Improve writting quality.. it’s hard to read more than 5 chapters.. Bro , please Improve writting quality.. it’s hard to read more than 5 chapters.. Bro , please Improve writting quality.. it’s hard to read more than 5 chapters.. Bro , please Improve writting quality.. it’s hard to read more than 5 chapters.. Bro , please Improve writting quality.. it’s hard to read more than 5 chapters.. Bro , please Improve writting quality.. it’s hard to read more than 5 chapters.. Bro , please Improve writting quality.. it’s hard to read more than 5 chapters.. Bro , please Improve writting quality.. it’s hard to read more than 5 chapters.. Bro , please Improve writting quality.. it’s hard to read more than 5 chapters..

LV 14

Biscuit_willieon

Wow I didn't know this was here well well for just in case if you don't see my last comment from your other story because confusing why you have to but OK. Yeah So there are many issues of your novel form many others and I hope this doesn't you know. My 1st opinion having a smart character needs love and more detail of the background Think of it like the actually smart you cannot just say they're smart and make you already think that a mild recommendation is to use some of the movie plots on anything you want to add in to improve the main characters point of view of the mc. My 2nd issue have of the story is there's no secondary characters or there are but not a lot like Ben it's like Ben AI hes having made but only gives you one time of showing of her talking and that's it and that's it not a different type of chapter so yeah. The 3rd problem I have with your fan fishing is machine is well it's going too fast a story is supposed to drag the weather into your well your imagination but you're a little bit skipping the details and you're saying this is what the M c's doing and and it ruins the taste of the stone which you'd be honest because I love what you try to do. But your neglection of chin of G details the sketching little bit difficult to continue because if the story keeps going so fast not many people will be interested at balance so yeah that's a recommendation to give you 2. And define all and 14 I have a major issue of it, It's the lack of information of the the Marvel MC universe ithe universe itself because you're going so fast it's so fast it doesn't sound like you're in the actual universe of the characters your love and sbeloved she it's gone so fast it's kind of boring of boring to be honest. To shorten my complaints of the story: 1. The plot is going too fast 2. There's no beginning of a mention of a actual beginning or any details of the story. 3. Lack of secondary characters( In other words like your AID MC says he made like those type of point of view characters) 4. The lack of morality of your character elector or in simple term the like what possession your coat or is in like is he good is he evil is he neutral I don't know because you don't didn't say FEM any path of the tags above.. 5. And also I kind of wanted to know about more about how how he worked at the time like how he interacted with the scientists and Tony's lab but again stoic went too fast and poverty would pee why I'm probably repeating what I just said above the 1st 3 bird plogman plot... ( And again I'm not trying to speak out on hate I'm not hitting your story I don't hate you I'm just giving my own opinions about the story and I hope it doesn't look like I'm spending hate to you but I hope you take my recommendations into heart hot because your story do have potential they sure it's just you haven't planned out what you wanted to write before you were) PS: You have potential and I'm not trying to make you quit writing but I hope my comments comments can activate your creative spirit to add more detail and expand the plot and to make your world what you want to do want to do so yeah I hope my recommendation can help you to achieve your goal.

LV 4

PowerStorm

Normally, it is an Honor and a Shame to give myself a Rating, but I will do it, for myself, and for all those other authors who do too[img=exp][img=exp]