Ssamsu Taekkyeon in MHA (GOH)

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Spirits_everywhere

Good idea, but mediocre execution. I mean, there was almost zero character development for the mc except knowing that he likes martial arts. I'm no professional writer, but I believe a good foundation for a story always depends on details. If you want the character to develop, then you should start making his personality flawed in some way. If you want to focus on developing his abilities instead, you should start by making his character stable. I have no idea which one you are planning to do, and if continue just forcing your way to the plot, it would not end up very enjoyable to read. Except maybe those readers who likes nothing but the canon plot, that is. Plus, a character is usually formed during your childhood. If you said you want to improve Bakugo's personality and character, you should start with showcasing the interactions between Bakugo and mc during their childhood and not during the start of canon because if you're doing it your way when the two of them are friends before canon, you are just basically forcing your way to canon plot, which stated above, it's boring. Your title contains the name of a martial arts, but there were basically zero development in martial arts. It's like chapter one: "Wow, I love martial arts, especially Ssam-Su Taekkyeon. *dies* *reborn with wishes*" And then chapter three: "Yay, I fully mastered Ssam-Su Taekkyeon" with like zero development. So unless you are planning on completely decapitating canon, a bland character with bland/repeated plot would not be interesting to read.

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Jack_Gilgamesh

Make a list of the MC's skills he can use all GOHS arts so can he use swords too?******************************************************************************************************************************************************************************************************************************

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randomdude101

The author here just to say that this is my first book and if you have any complaints be sure to tell me I read all the reviews make me a little depressed....but I will try to improve my story PLUS ULTRA!

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EnkiduSky

interesting I liked it so far ---------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------

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kickyx

Good idea, bad execution. Your biggest mistake was the timeskips. You pretty much time-skipped all the way to cannon and only had 1 moment that wasnt a summary of what he did in a timeskip which was when he fought a thug that for some reason wanted to provoke him when he was training in a gym.. (he's 10 btw) and then the thug thinks its a good idea to fight him.. Its really forced and unrealistic and ruins the flow entirely. Another thing, you didnt really develop anything in the story you just told us he did something. For example, you never showed any moments where he was training his martial arts you just told us he mastered it.. Another example is the personality of the mc, it wasnt developed at all, all we know is that he likes martial arts and watches anime.. Finally, this story wasnt honestly thought out becuase if he mastered his martial arts then he cant really improve anymore and itll be a constant repeat of him fighting and winning with no losses or development of character for him..