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it was worse than some of the worse hp fanfics.thank you for lowering my expectation about hp fanfics.
Except for gender grammar problems and just a few singular versus multiple additives, this is a great story. The her versus him, private versus privates are examples. The structure and the other things, make me believe English is not the authors first language.
Really good story, but be aware that while tecnically complete, there's a second season, and the chapters stopped 2 years ago. I can only hope the author decides to restart releasing chapters!
Author used his innovative Idea in this story but he was so engrossed in his idea he forgot no matter what harry was currently 6 year old max as he only knowledge of Canon and money making. as for his last knowledge he is basically dumb. and the story deviate from main story.
Nah Sorry the thing with Harry and his Aunt and a relationshipp, that may bee between them kinda put me of the story, simply No No Nooo, sorry...
The beginning is really interesting and the premise is excellent, but it continues badly. After reading chapter 12 I was unable to continue. Ok the harem, in fact I was very intrigued by a harem in Harry Potter, but it is very badly managed. A protagonist who only thinks about earning points and having fun, without thinking about the feelings of others. The story had taken a bad turn when he had chosen Petunia as his first target and he was only one year old ... but I was able to turn a blind eye, since he wasn't really a child. I can't rate the story too badly even though I dropped it, as it is well written, with good character descriptions. Personally I don't recommend it.
YANDERE YANDERE YANDERE YANDERE YANDERE YANDERE YANDERE YANDERE YANDERE YANDERE YANDERE YANDERE YANDERE YANDERE YANDERE YANDERE YANDERE YANDERE YANDERE YANDERE.... That's why I like it...๐คฃ
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all in all it's a damn good story but the fact that it's no longer updating is disappointing
im not gonna really dwell in to it but i was annoyed i was just here fpr the hermione ship but that is gonna take me a few day just to get there amd dont feel like skipping and befor you say im skipping to early made it to 44 and im done..
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Overall itโs not a bad story, itโs engaging and draws you in out of curiosity. I think it needs to be edited better, specifically with transitions, some grammar, and possibly reworking the character development too.
Thanks for the hard work ๐ Thanks for the hard work ๐ Thanks for the hard work ๐ Thanks for the hard work ๐ Thanks for the hard work ๐ Thanks for the hard work ๐
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Buena para ser una historia que tiene todo lo que uno pueda pedir y yo aca hablando para llenar huecos y podef dar la reรฑa๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐
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Love it. Recomand it. You have to read it. โคโคโคโคโคโคโคโคโคโคโคโคโคโคโคโคโคโคโคโคโคโคโคโคโคโคโคโคโคโคโคโคโคโคโคโคโคโคโคโคโคโคโคโคโคโคโคโคโคโคโคโคโคโคโคโคโคโคโคโค ๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐
๐ ๐ ๐๐๐๐ ๐โบโบ๐๐๐๐ ๐๐ฐ๐ฐ๐ฐ๐๐๐๐๐๐ฐ๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐ฐ๐ฐ๐๐ฐ๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐ ๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐ฐ๐จ๐จ๐ข๐จ๐๐บ๐๐๐ ๐ ๐ค๐๐๐๐ ๐บ๐บ
๐คฃ๐คฃ๐คฃ๐คฃ๐คฃ๐คฃ๐คฃ๐คฃ๐คฃ๐คฃ๐คฃ๐คฃ๐คฃ๐คฃ๐คฃ๐คฃ๐คฃ๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐โโโโโโโโโโโโโโโโโโ๐น๐น๐น๐น๐น๐น๐น๐น๐น๐น๐น๐น๐น๐น๐น๐น๐น๐น
๐คฃ๐คฃ๐คฃ๐คฃ๐คฃ๐คฃ๐คฃ๐คฃ๐คฃ๐คฃ๐คฃ๐คฃ๐คฃ๐คฃ๐คฃ๐คฃ๐คฃ๐คฃ๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐น๐น๐น๐น๐น๐น๐น๐น๐น๐น๐น๐น๐น๐น๐น๐น๐น๐น๐คฉ๐คฉ๐คฉ๐คฉ๐คฉ๐คฉ๐คฉ๐คฉ๐คฉ๐คฉ๐คฉ๐คฉ๐คฉ๐คฉ๐คฉ๐คฉ๐คฉ๐คฉ
I just finished reading this novel and I loved it. In the beginning there were grammar mistakes often, but as it went on they became less and less. The story is great and the creativity of the author is apparent. There were a few scenes with some women that were summarized that I would have loved to read about, but s/heโs the author. The explicit chapters are done really well and I canโt wait to continue reading!
First, let me say that I have no writing experience before this novel, so, if you are expecting great writing from the first chapter, then I have to disappoint you. Of course, my writing gets better with each passing chapter, which you can see and compare with the 14th chapter. After the 14th chapter, each one is getting better. A few points to note: The story is about young Harry, who gets the system and some memories, in Harry Potter World. I will be adding new characters (most of the girls, few boys for the sake of the story). There will be nine Horcrux, not seven. Each year will be somewhat different from the original. Harry's main goal is to become Harem Lord, so the story will focus in that direction, not on Voldemort. There won't be cultivation. book will focus on magic. I am giving my novel five stars not for the current chapters, but for the future. Before the novel ends, it will have the quality of five starts. Believe it! (sounds like Naruto๐) I am writing this novel to improve my writing skills. I appreciate all the help I can get. Please leave me constructive remarks to enhance my writing if you may. Thank you!
it was worse than some of the worse hp fanfics.thank you for lowering my expectation about hp fanfics.
Except for gender grammar problems and just a few singular versus multiple additives, this is a great story. The her versus him, private versus privates are examples. The structure and the other things, make me believe English is not the authors first language.
Really good story, but be aware that while tecnically complete, there's a second season, and the chapters stopped 2 years ago. I can only hope the author decides to restart releasing chapters!
Author used his innovative Idea in this story but he was so engrossed in his idea he forgot no matter what harry was currently 6 year old max as he only knowledge of Canon and money making. as for his last knowledge he is basically dumb. and the story deviate from main story.
Nah Sorry the thing with Harry and his Aunt and a relationshipp, that may bee between them kinda put me of the story, simply No No Nooo, sorry...
The beginning is really interesting and the premise is excellent, but it continues badly. After reading chapter 12 I was unable to continue. Ok the harem, in fact I was very intrigued by a harem in Harry Potter, but it is very badly managed. A protagonist who only thinks about earning points and having fun, without thinking about the feelings of others. The story had taken a bad turn when he had chosen Petunia as his first target and he was only one year old ... but I was able to turn a blind eye, since he wasn't really a child. I can't rate the story too badly even though I dropped it, as it is well written, with good character descriptions. Personally I don't recommend it.
YANDERE YANDERE YANDERE YANDERE YANDERE YANDERE YANDERE YANDERE YANDERE YANDERE YANDERE YANDERE YANDERE YANDERE YANDERE YANDERE YANDERE YANDERE YANDERE YANDERE.... That's why I like it...๐คฃ
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all in all it's a damn good story but the fact that it's no longer updating is disappointing
im not gonna really dwell in to it but i was annoyed i was just here fpr the hermione ship but that is gonna take me a few day just to get there amd dont feel like skipping and befor you say im skipping to early made it to 44 and im done..
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Reveal Spoiler HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM
Wtf๐๐คฎ๐คฎ๐คฎ๐คฎ๐คฎ๐คฎ๐คฎ๐คฎ๐คฎ๐คฎ๐คฎ๐คฎ๐คฎ๐คฎ๐คฎ๐คฎ๐คฎ๐คฎ๐คฎ๐คฎ๐คฎ๐คฎ๐คฎ๐คฎ๐คฎ๐คฎ๐คฎ๐คฎ๐คฎ๐คฎ๐คฎ๐คฎ๐คฎ๐คฎ๐คฎ๐คฎ๐คฎ๐คฎ๐คฎ๐คฎ๐คฎ๐๐ง โ๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐
รok iyi olmuลtu be dostum daha fazla bรถlรผm gรถndwrseydiniz daha iyi olurdu. Yada sen yeni bรถlรผmlรผ bir hikayeye baลla oda gรผzwl olur. Gรผzel kitap olmuล
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Superb...Please update..Please update..Please update..Please update..Please update..Please update..Please update..Please update..Please update
Overall itโs not a bad story, itโs engaging and draws you in out of curiosity. I think it needs to be edited better, specifically with transitions, some grammar, and possibly reworking the character development too.
Thanks for the hard work ๐ Thanks for the hard work ๐ Thanks for the hard work ๐ Thanks for the hard work ๐ Thanks for the hard work ๐ Thanks for the hard work ๐
Reveal Spoiler Buena para ser una historia que tiene todo lo que uno pueda pedir y yo aca hablando para llenar huecos y podef dar la reรฑa๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐
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Love it. Recomand it. You have to read it. โคโคโคโคโคโคโคโคโคโคโคโคโคโคโคโคโคโคโคโคโคโคโคโคโคโคโคโคโคโคโคโคโคโคโคโคโคโคโคโคโคโคโคโคโคโคโคโคโคโคโคโคโคโคโคโคโคโคโคโค ๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐
๐ ๐ ๐๐๐๐ ๐โบโบ๐๐๐๐ ๐๐ฐ๐ฐ๐ฐ๐๐๐๐๐๐ฐ๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐ฐ๐ฐ๐๐ฐ๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐ ๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐ฐ๐จ๐จ๐ข๐จ๐๐บ๐๐๐ ๐ ๐ค๐๐๐๐ ๐บ๐บ
๐คฃ๐คฃ๐คฃ๐คฃ๐คฃ๐คฃ๐คฃ๐คฃ๐คฃ๐คฃ๐คฃ๐คฃ๐คฃ๐คฃ๐คฃ๐คฃ๐คฃ๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐โโโโโโโโโโโโโโโโโโ๐น๐น๐น๐น๐น๐น๐น๐น๐น๐น๐น๐น๐น๐น๐น๐น๐น๐น
๐คฃ๐คฃ๐คฃ๐คฃ๐คฃ๐คฃ๐คฃ๐คฃ๐คฃ๐คฃ๐คฃ๐คฃ๐คฃ๐คฃ๐คฃ๐คฃ๐คฃ๐คฃ๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐น๐น๐น๐น๐น๐น๐น๐น๐น๐น๐น๐น๐น๐น๐น๐น๐น๐น๐คฉ๐คฉ๐คฉ๐คฉ๐คฉ๐คฉ๐คฉ๐คฉ๐คฉ๐คฉ๐คฉ๐คฉ๐คฉ๐คฉ๐คฉ๐คฉ๐คฉ๐คฉ
I just finished reading this novel and I loved it. In the beginning there were grammar mistakes often, but as it went on they became less and less. The story is great and the creativity of the author is apparent. There were a few scenes with some women that were summarized that I would have loved to read about, but s/heโs the author. The explicit chapters are done really well and I canโt wait to continue reading!
First, let me say that I have no writing experience before this novel, so, if you are expecting great writing from the first chapter, then I have to disappoint you. Of course, my writing gets better with each passing chapter, which you can see and compare with the 14th chapter. After the 14th chapter, each one is getting better. A few points to note: The story is about young Harry, who gets the system and some memories, in Harry Potter World. I will be adding new characters (most of the girls, few boys for the sake of the story). There will be nine Horcrux, not seven. Each year will be somewhat different from the original. Harry's main goal is to become Harem Lord, so the story will focus in that direction, not on Voldemort. There won't be cultivation. book will focus on magic. I am giving my novel five stars not for the current chapters, but for the future. Before the novel ends, it will have the quality of five starts. Believe it! (sounds like Naruto๐) I am writing this novel to improve my writing skills. I appreciate all the help I can get. Please leave me constructive remarks to enhance my writing if you may. Thank you!